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July 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Well, the lemons were hot, but the story was shit, especially the ending.
Why is Link suddenly fine with the fact that the most he can have with Zelda is an affair?
Why did Link toss Malon aside like a cum-stained tissue? Even if she's not ready to marry him right this second, his future with her is brighter than his future with the woman who plans to marry someone else, breaks it off with him and then gets upset when she sees him with another woman.
Why is Link suddenly fine with the fact that the most he can have with Zelda is an affair?
Why did Link toss Malon aside like a cum-stained tissue? Even if she's not ready to marry him right this second, his future with her is brighter than his future with the woman who plans to marry someone else, breaks it off with him and then gets upset when she sees him with another woman.
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April 17, 2014 at 12:00 AM
"First, let's talk about bras."
I laughed imaging Zelda's reaction. Then, proceeded to think about the rest of the things they would talk about.
I laughed imaging Zelda's reaction. Then, proceeded to think about the rest of the things they would talk about.
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March 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Few things kill a boner like having an Aesop dropped in the middle of my porn. The sex was good and entertaining but the story such as it was distracts from the real reason the read the story.
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July 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The ending actually kind of disappoints me, but whatever. Your story, your ending. Whatever works for you! Good job overall!
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July 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'd agree, it was good, even with the drama, but the ending felt rushed, forced, just...off, somehow.
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July 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The lemons were hot, and as a Malink shipper I'm biased. The ending was poor though, not much was resolved. Sure things may get more lively in the bedroom for Link and Zelda, but Link is still seen as a commoner and their relationship still needs to be kept secret while Zelda marries someone else. Considering those plot elements were introduced pointedly in their segments, they ultimately didn't really go anywhere.
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June 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sexy story for a while, but lame ending. Mature in a sense, but lame. I feel sorry for Link, eternally doomed to be a back-door man whenever Zelda can fit him in to her real life. Plus she gets to sleep with the King while Link has to stay faithful. Not much of a life for Link. Would have been better off with him happily nailing the female population of Hyrule. More fair to him, more fun to read. If you wanted to end it fast he should have at least kept Malon.
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June 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I liked most of it, very mature and realistic. I couldn't help but feel that the ending was a cop out, though. Too forgiving, too fast. Also, it doesn't really solve anything; Zelda will still be married to the king, and Link will be a lay on the side.
Besides that, though, the read was enjoyable, and your writing is something I hope to see more of.
Besides that, though, the read was enjoyable, and your writing is something I hope to see more of.
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June 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ehh... the hot bits were good, but the rest felt contrived and the ending felt forced. What about Malon, what if -she- got pregnant too?
Basically, your smut is good, but if you're going to have a backdrop and a story behind it they need to be solid. Otherwise it's a waste of time, and it seems forced.
Basically, your smut is good, but if you're going to have a backdrop and a story behind it they need to be solid. Otherwise it's a waste of time, and it seems forced.
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June 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story is very well written. The characterizations are very believable and full, and the plot fits snuggly in canon. Keep. I look forward to more.