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October 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
A beautiful story. I can only hope for more.
While clearly centered around the love scenes you so wonderfully create, you integrate enough plot and thoughts to maintain a sense of realism. I can totally believe Kelly, as a sexually liberated soul, is the instigator, and Miranda as the inhibited, work-driven but curious one. You have taken existing character traits and extended them further from the ME universe, rather than creating your own. Hence, you have made it realistic, which is something that makes your work all the more appealing to readers like myself.
Multiple parts too denotes devotion and you have clearly outlined the story properly as a continuing exploration of sexual boundaries. You write with no distracting mistakes despite the significant breadth of your work, and your prose is excellent.
You should be proud of this story. It is one of the gems I return to on this site, and which serves as some inspiration for me as I write as a fellow writer.
Well done.
While clearly centered around the love scenes you so wonderfully create, you integrate enough plot and thoughts to maintain a sense of realism. I can totally believe Kelly, as a sexually liberated soul, is the instigator, and Miranda as the inhibited, work-driven but curious one. You have taken existing character traits and extended them further from the ME universe, rather than creating your own. Hence, you have made it realistic, which is something that makes your work all the more appealing to readers like myself.
Multiple parts too denotes devotion and you have clearly outlined the story properly as a continuing exploration of sexual boundaries. You write with no distracting mistakes despite the significant breadth of your work, and your prose is excellent.
You should be proud of this story. It is one of the gems I return to on this site, and which serves as some inspiration for me as I write as a fellow writer.
Well done.
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December 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I really hope you decide to write more! This story is really awesome!
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October 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best fanfictions I have read in a long time!
It's such a delight to read about a BDSM relationship where it doesn't turn into mushy love, and remains on the incredibly sexy zone of pushing boundaries.
I am really hoping for more, fast and for Miranda to be pushed further and further down whatever path Kelly might want her to go!
It's such a delight to read about a BDSM relationship where it doesn't turn into mushy love, and remains on the incredibly sexy zone of pushing boundaries.
I am really hoping for more, fast and for Miranda to be pushed further and further down whatever path Kelly might want her to go!
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June 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. I'm looking forward to where you go with this. Any chance of some f/shep getting involved somewhere along the line?
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May 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Kelly rimming Miranda, huh? Phew, that's just absolutely filthy and absolutely wonderful. Nice and short, this.
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May 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, very hot smut in the opening chapter. Keeping the young woman's identity a secret until the end was driving me up a wall, but I loved the reveal all the same. I'm happy to hear that this is more than a oneshot; so many AFF fics are oneshots. I'm also glad to see Miranda and Miranda's companion getting some attention (especially her companion). So many fics myopically focus on Shepard and Shepard's ground team that seeing a pairing like this is both exciting and refreshing.
Shepard isn't the only person with a libido in space, after all ;)
Here's hoping Miranda gets over her shock and comes around.
AssembledCarbon
Shepard isn't the only person with a libido in space, after all ;)
Here's hoping Miranda gets over her shock and comes around.
AssembledCarbon
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May 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was so hot. You know, I'm not really a Miranda fan to a huge extent but even though this was just for fun I ALMOST could see it happening in game. Miranda has a stressful job and very little privacy. Close quarters when people have needs....well. Well done. Very sexy.