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Surprisingly interesting to read, I must say! The no-sex chapters are fine since you do have a plot going with this. Dare I hazard a guess on the next member of the harem :D? I'm so sure it'll be Ina, and then SSX. Well, either way, I'm intrigued enough to hang around this fic.

Not a problem for the lack of sex in this chapter, at least, your story does have a plot :)
I don't have any problem with the inclusion of new characters, and why not Sun Tzu???
He fits well in this universe.

The no sex in this chapter is no problem to me, build-up is always a plus and I say do it if it feels right. It helps to get the atmosphere and concerns of the game across alongside the sex, since after all what's the point of reading something if you could easily change the names of the characters and claim it's a story about a different game? I liked this chapter, naturally looking forward to the next one.

Great new chapter. I like the twist of Diao Chan stealing control from Da Ji, both for the underhandedness of it and that Diao Chan's been portrayed up to this point as a lot more heartless. Most stories I've read by other people start with a lot of potential and slowly lose it, and I like that you're going the opposite way. As for characters to use, don't feel like you MUST include them if it stifles your creativity. My own greatest preference is Ginchiyo, who I hope to write something about some day (in fact I almost wrote a Warriors Orochi story once of Da Ji getting back at Kunoichi for making fun of her behind her back in WO1), with Noh second and Ina third. Ginchiyo for her "trying to get others to view her on the same level as a man" vibe, Ina for trying to be daddy's (warrior) girl, and Noh for black widow sophistication.

Your story takes an interesting direction.
The next chapter will be certainly very, very good :D
I have absolutly no complaint about the story either ^^

I would like to see some SW girls added to the harem (like Ginchiyo or Kai-Hime) if it's possible ^^
Something's telling me that they won't like dominance one a bit XD

Keep up your great work!!

Your story made me register on AFF :D You can be proud of you lol
Really good story, it's nice to see something based on a Koei game, for once! I love the progression of this, so far.
I can't wait to see the 4th chapter!

It started kind of slow and worked its way to a little more intriguing. I like the premise and what came about end of second chapter and throughout third chapter, it sets up for very promising developments. There's a few issues with grammar and spelling, but only very minor ones, nothing too serious. I would've liked more description and action in some areas too, like what it was like when Zhen Ji had to follow Da Ji naked back to camp. Surely it must have been difficult for Zhen Ji to handle the humiliation of not only being forced to show everyone her naked body while following Da Ji, but also displaying herself as a spoiled, weakling empress of Wei that can't even keep the clothes on her back without someone to protect her. They're excellent base ideas, I just think a little bit more to them could go a very long way. Good luck with future chapters!