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May 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I rather enjoyed the second and third chapters, though I do feel Luserina's blowjob and Lun's masturbation could have been a little longer and a bit more detailed. Especially the masturbation scene. Though perhaps I don't really have the right to complain about sex scenes being too short. ;)
Anyway, looking forward to more of Lun's experimentation or, possibly, Luserina's uncontrollable desire to suck girlcock.
Anyway, looking forward to more of Lun's experimentation or, possibly, Luserina's uncontrollable desire to suck girlcock.
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May 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Nice short teaser chapter! I wonder how Roog would have apprehended the situation and her member if he would've been there. Perhaps we'll find out in the next chapter? ;) It's not to often I read a solo scene but it was a refreshing experience! The Isabel/Mathias intercourse scream for more attention but at the same time I like these brief encounters with various characters and pairings. By doing so you can also hint a continuation and let the readers share their thoughts for future chapters. If they're unlazy enough that is.. Good to see you around again!
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May 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Incredible.
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December 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hmm. Not really sure what to say about this one. On the one hand, it's an effective bit of smut. On the other hand, it's just an effective bit of smut.
Fuck it. It's a good futa stroker (even though I don't consider 'slimy' to be a particularly sexy word) and there aren't enough of those. In my perhaps somewhat biased opinion.
One thing, though. I take it this story is something of a sequel to 'Secrets under the Sun'? The connection isn't particularly clear. You could have indicated it in an Author's Note or the summary or whatever so that the opening lines aren't as confusing as they currently are. Or, perhaps, spend a paragraph or two on Lun actually confronting Jeane and getting a confession out of her instead of jumping right into the very nice dickgirl smut.
Fuck it. It's a good futa stroker (even though I don't consider 'slimy' to be a particularly sexy word) and there aren't enough of those. In my perhaps somewhat biased opinion.
One thing, though. I take it this story is something of a sequel to 'Secrets under the Sun'? The connection isn't particularly clear. You could have indicated it in an Author's Note or the summary or whatever so that the opening lines aren't as confusing as they currently are. Or, perhaps, spend a paragraph or two on Lun actually confronting Jeane and getting a confession out of her instead of jumping right into the very nice dickgirl smut.