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for Brotherly Love

by RyuheiAoi

person fantome1
schedule January 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant. Also, personally I'd pick Mia. I'd have Mist and Ike stay together, without Mia for the ending though, just the two of them.

Five stars.
schedule December 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Nice beginning. You mentioned Mia and Marcia, and I agree that the two of them are the best choices for the unnamed young voyeur. Not sure whether you're going to have this third character blackmail her way into the fun, or have her go about it in a less devious manner. Either way, I'll be reading.
person 2FD2
schedule December 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Shameless smut, and as such I approve of it wholeheartedly. Good work.
person daveb
schedule December 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Amazing, but add more detail to the smut.

I think you should leave it at Ike/Mist (with different positions, and anal), with Marcia secretly watching them.
schedule December 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm a big fan of Ike/Mist, and just Mist in general, and I approve. Drawing out the smut part may not be a bad idea, but it's pretty damn good as is. I'm partial to Mia as a potential love interest, but there's so little of Marcia out there that it may freshen things up.
schedule December 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Not sure about the young girl for next time, but...

In the future, throw in Lethe. Or Titania; redheads are hot!