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July 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
loved
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June 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
lol, i adore this story so far!
but, will she ever again encounter the three khajjit brothers?!
but, will she ever again encounter the three khajjit brothers?!
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March 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love how enthusiastic you are. It's kinda sweet, so I'm going to give you some advice. I know you're writing just for fun, and that English isn't your first language, but it never hurts to learn.
I'd put all the thoughts in italics (which is HTML on this site) rather than using a tilde (~). It's just that generally, inner thoughts are denoted this way-- it's not so much a rule as a matter of 'what the majority of other people do.' People are more likely to recognise that it's the character's thoughts. However, like I said, this isn't a rule, it's just that it is more easy to recognise and looks far neater on the page.
Also, always proofread. You capitalise some 'I's, but don't with others. All of them should be in capitals.
Still, like I said, very cute.
I'd put all the thoughts in italics (which is HTML on this site) rather than using a tilde (~). It's just that generally, inner thoughts are denoted this way-- it's not so much a rule as a matter of 'what the majority of other people do.' People are more likely to recognise that it's the character's thoughts. However, like I said, this isn't a rule, it's just that it is more easy to recognise and looks far neater on the page.
Also, always proofread. You capitalise some 'I's, but don't with others. All of them should be in capitals.
Still, like I said, very cute.