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i really like this, its yuri thats hot but sweet, all dragon age fanfics shoudl be that way

Well, what can I say? Your story continues to be really very nice.

Keep it up.

Sweet little fic (apart from the opening, perhaps). Still, I can't help but feel that you didn't make the most out of the bondage scene. There's no real sense that the scene would've been significantly different if Neria hadn't been tied up. Since it seems the elf isn't naturally submissive (though since Leliana is, apparently, always in control perhaps I'm wrong about this), I wonder what she would have done if she hadn't been tied up and what the differences in her response are now that she can't.

I guess what I'm trying to say is that from where I'm sitting, there isn't any really obvious difference between Neria tied up and Neria not tied up, so why bother?

Then again, since this isn't a one-shot, apparently, perhaps the second chapter can enlighten me. Because I really did enjoy this first chapter in spite of my bitching and would like to read more.

Oh, and it's spelled 'Orlais', not 'Orlay'. ;)

I liked this, very much so! I can't wait to read more. I have to admit, I've never really seen Leliana like that before, but, I really like that change to her. I can't wait to read more. Good work!