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Hi, sorry for not reading in a while. I've been trying to prod myself to do so (and he hasn't left a review, but Anonelbe has been too), but I've been feeling put off knowing some of the limits placed on where it could go. That's understandable though, we all have things we don't want to do, or at least don't have strong enough inspiration for. It's happened to me plenty of times with things people have asked to see.

In chapter 5, I'm confused on how Gina could see her lust as the cause of Crono's (what appeared at the time to be) death. Maybe I missed or forgot something, but I can't think of anything to suggest it. Robo suggesting the anal intercourse mode made me laugh, and I'm glad you specified it's a function built in by Lucca since I'm starting to feel like Lucca's the only one that feels right as a partner for Robo. Anything else I can say is pretty much taken care of by the votes as well as the number and content of reviews.

Very excellent so far, quite enjoyable. Also very pleasing to see a fic interested in taking a look at a number of aspects, people and things... You might call it a PWP, but it's a beautifully crafted piece compared to a lot one might find here, heheh. I think you've captured much of the characters in question well, and I only hitched at one or two points that made me hesitate over an action or dialogue... but then, when the purpose is smut, that's really hard to avoid anyway, so very good job there.

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At one point, I found myself getting a bit lost on the physical dynamics; Gina's 'dismount' from Robo, that little sequence, from her initial position (back to the wall, arms and legs around a standing partner), through to final pose (on hands and knees... rear towards Robo?) was hard to follow... Easy to lose track of the actual physical movement there, maybe a better way to describe it? Not to complain, but I've always really noticed dynamics in my own writing, and felt the need to pay close attention to them, so it's what I automatically pick out when reading others.

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Aside from that really enjoying it... I imagine though, Lucca is a bright and perceptive girl... I feel as though, given a couple of things now, she's going to know or work out that _someone_ has been finding (and playing with) things she'd rather they not.

I find myself wondering just how far along Janus's personal timeline the version of him we met was... Post events at least though, all things considered... which would mean... **giggles** I like the way you work. Makes me want to ditch this thesis I'm working on and get back to the Chrono Trigger fic I'm writing...

Excellent stuff, keep it up.

-Niara

and that bump she's gonna have isn't a wart... don't worry, it'll come to you

Now it REALLY reminds me of Chester 5000 XYV. Except with more ladies.

If I might make a suggestion... perhaps Gina might be stuck in a closet, with some other people outside doing the dirty?

dude, this is great stuff. funny as hell and has some lemony promise to it. keep up the good work.

I am reminded of the Jess Fink webcomic, Chester 5000 XYV; all that was missing was that cheerful little VERT!

Aside from being short, it was pretty good.

his semen tasted like olive oil.... was that a virgin pun?

Good two new chapters! I like your using the name of a song on the soundtrack for the third chapter's title. Lucca having invented and using a vibrator was an excellent idea, I've talked with Anonelbe a few times about how eagerly she'd take to using Robo for sex and having him go by R-66Y because it reminds her she's having sex with a wonder of technology.

I didn't think the Catalack thing was something to get overly concerned about; that's kinda like questioning why Steel Runner is there too. As for nothing much about Crono's mom on here, sadly a lot of writers out there don't think about or want to touch certain characters. Specifically to Chrono Trigger, I can only recall "Chrono Trigger: Loyalty" as any other fics besides mine that star Queen Zeal. Closest I've found of her hentai-wise was a highly suggestive (AND AWESOME) picture of Queen Zeal x Magus lying in bed together. Gina clearly has it worse, it seems like if it's not yaoi then only the overly popular characters and fictional universes that draw in tons of readers will get much attention. But, the people who write about lesser appreciated characters tend to put more heart and effort into it, at least in my reading experience. Looking forward to more chapters, it's enjoyable to read and uplifting to see you writing about a character like Gina.

Ohhh boy. It's getting good now!

Wow do I ever look forward to when Gina meets Ayla...as for people to satisfy her until then, I don't suppose Elaine and Lara are free?