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for The World as it Should Be

by TaurusLizzie

schedule August 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Uh-oh. Was it the orc watching them, or someone else? Ah, the suspense!

Transition between scenes in this chapter was a bit rough - I had a very hard time following it; the story had broken flow. It's not something you usually do, hmm...

The juicy bits were still good, though :)
schedule August 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I LOVED Deydis from "Native Tongues", and am thrilled to see his playboy self back in action again :)

HOT so far, eager for the continuation of this :)

I'm not quite sure why you don't get more reviews than you do; I adore all your work!