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January 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Bweheheheheheee! First i mujst say I've read all your fics, and I am always highly amused by the outtakes. I've laughed so hard I've fallen out of my computer chair.
The next thing, you're writing is wonderful. Yeah there are some errors but everyone makes little mistakes. It's 6AM for me and I've just finished all of them finally. I couldn't sleep without it. Absolutely wonderful. Now I think It's time to go to bed lol. Update soon please!
The next thing, you're writing is wonderful. Yeah there are some errors but everyone makes little mistakes. It's 6AM for me and I've just finished all of them finally. I couldn't sleep without it. Absolutely wonderful. Now I think It's time to go to bed lol. Update soon please!
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November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I know, I'm more than a bit late this time around (you can blame work, school, and Fallout 3 for that). This is quite the chapter you've got here though. A little different from your usual writing, but still very impressive.
First off, very nice segue between chapters. Going from Jak standing at the balcony panicking to Jak taking out that panic on some hapless recruits was refreshing.
Second, this chapter was just amazing when it came to plot development. You did a good job showing and not telling; your dialogue continues to be top-notch.
Lastly, another cliffhanger ending! Really? Just joking, ending was quite...enticing, and the outtakes were, as per your usual, hilarious. Good luck on your finals, and hope to see more from you soon!
First off, very nice segue between chapters. Going from Jak standing at the balcony panicking to Jak taking out that panic on some hapless recruits was refreshing.
Second, this chapter was just amazing when it came to plot development. You did a good job showing and not telling; your dialogue continues to be top-notch.
Lastly, another cliffhanger ending! Really? Just joking, ending was quite...enticing, and the outtakes were, as per your usual, hilarious. Good luck on your finals, and hope to see more from you soon!
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November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
lol I knew he was going to come back. X3 But I can only imagine the look on Jak's face when Daxter transformed for him at the end. XD Priceless. X3 *giggle*
What I want to know is why did Samos capture Daxter? And, if the kid was important enough to bring him back to Spargus from such a distance, why would he let Damas just toss him to the traders?
... Meh, my brain hurts. XP Still, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that's posted. =3
What I want to know is why did Samos capture Daxter? And, if the kid was important enough to bring him back to Spargus from such a distance, why would he let Damas just toss him to the traders?
... Meh, my brain hurts. XP Still, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that's posted. =3
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November 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love you so much!
O-o
Write more please :3
O-o
Write more please :3
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November 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"Uh-oh. Looks like Jak’s troubles are far from over, with an enemy force massing just outside the palace walls and a teasing shape-shifter in his bed who seems to raise more mysteries than answers."
That's not the only thing Daxter's raising . . .
MORE PLEASE. ASAP. . . . PLEASE.
That's not the only thing Daxter's raising . . .
MORE PLEASE. ASAP. . . . PLEASE.
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October 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sig: (salutes) I’ve asked the prince to report for duty, sir.
Torn: Very good, soldier. Now, as I was saying— (glances randomly toward the palace) Jak, what the hell are you doing?! Get off the damn balcony, boy, you’re naked!!
Spargus Army: (stares in awe and wonder)
Torn: *face-palm* They don’t pay me enough to deal with this…
You flabbergast me sometimes. Looking forward to the next, mischievous chapter!
Torn: Very good, soldier. Now, as I was saying— (glances randomly toward the palace) Jak, what the hell are you doing?! Get off the damn balcony, boy, you’re naked!!
Spargus Army: (stares in awe and wonder)
Torn: *face-palm* They don’t pay me enough to deal with this…
You flabbergast me sometimes. Looking forward to the next, mischievous chapter!
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October 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was wondering when we'd get the next installment of this. You've been working overtime haven't you?
Well, it was awfully nice of Jak to give Dax a rest, especially considering that he knew they'd have to separate for a while. And how handy of Jak to keep a bottle of oil close by with which to entertain his guest. You continue to amaze me with your writing Robin, the descriptions and, most importantly, the characterization is consistently incredible. Still, I...I hate to admit it (really, this is just me nitpicking again), but I was kinda surprised when you told us what Jak said to Daxter instead of writing out the dialogue. I know that with your amazing dialogue skills it would probably had sounded a bit better that way. Just a thought really.
All in all though, it was a great chapter. I can't wait to see where the plot goes from here!
P.S.: By the way, I'm very impressed with your grammar and spelling abilities. You've written so much, and I haven't spotted a single mistake to date. I know you said that you were really strict with the subject in one of your profiles, and you really weren't kidding!
Well, it was awfully nice of Jak to give Dax a rest, especially considering that he knew they'd have to separate for a while. And how handy of Jak to keep a bottle of oil close by with which to entertain his guest. You continue to amaze me with your writing Robin, the descriptions and, most importantly, the characterization is consistently incredible. Still, I...I hate to admit it (really, this is just me nitpicking again), but I was kinda surprised when you told us what Jak said to Daxter instead of writing out the dialogue. I know that with your amazing dialogue skills it would probably had sounded a bit better that way. Just a thought really.
All in all though, it was a great chapter. I can't wait to see where the plot goes from here!
P.S.: By the way, I'm very impressed with your grammar and spelling abilities. You've written so much, and I haven't spotted a single mistake to date. I know you said that you were really strict with the subject in one of your profiles, and you really weren't kidding!
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October 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"I turned my best friend into a weasel!" roflmao XD I'd feel sorry for Jak if I wasn't so busy rolling on the floor. X3 As sweet and hot as the preceeding events were, you still get me with your humor. ;3
Case in point, the outtakes. lol XD Still gold, still lovin' em'. ^w^
See you next time! =D
Case in point, the outtakes. lol XD Still gold, still lovin' em'. ^w^
See you next time! =D
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August 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sorry it's a bit late, but I've been a little busy due to work.
Anyways, this chapter really delivered! Definitely worth the wait and build-up of the last two installments. I'm so glad poor Daxter finally got over his anxieties (for the most part), and I have to admit that you really did a great job working with Jak's perspective of things. Furthermore, despite this being the 5th story you've written, the lemons and fluff never seems to get old. It must be hard coming up with a different scene each time, not to mention avoiding using the same descriptions or passages. I really give you credit for that.
As always, the descriptions and narrative were excellent, no flaws in spelling or grammar, wonderful pacing, and believable dialogue (or would that be monologue?); I'd tell you to attempt writing a novel, but that would take away from your fanfic time.
I know school is going to be starting up again soon (or has it already started for you?), but I'm really looking forward to the next part of this story. Don't put aside the more important things just to please your fans though.
Anyways, this chapter really delivered! Definitely worth the wait and build-up of the last two installments. I'm so glad poor Daxter finally got over his anxieties (for the most part), and I have to admit that you really did a great job working with Jak's perspective of things. Furthermore, despite this being the 5th story you've written, the lemons and fluff never seems to get old. It must be hard coming up with a different scene each time, not to mention avoiding using the same descriptions or passages. I really give you credit for that.
As always, the descriptions and narrative were excellent, no flaws in spelling or grammar, wonderful pacing, and believable dialogue (or would that be monologue?); I'd tell you to attempt writing a novel, but that would take away from your fanfic time.
I know school is going to be starting up again soon (or has it already started for you?), but I'm really looking forward to the next part of this story. Don't put aside the more important things just to please your fans though.
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August 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
;_; This is so sexy (and dare I say it--grown up!). Where did you learn to write things like that?! I never considered how adorable a sex scene could be when Dax is the quiet one. Physically, he's the more expressive of the two.
The little comment about Torn actually almost made my jaw drop. What a terrifying image! But I think it really works for this kind of playful, princely Jak.
:3 As always, I love your work.
The little comment about Torn actually almost made my jaw drop. What a terrifying image! But I think it really works for this kind of playful, princely Jak.
:3 As always, I love your work.