rate_review Reviews

oh I love it, they are my favorite pair! I'm currently drawing a WIP Ky atm.

oh I love it, they are my favorite pair! I'm currently drawing a WIP Ky atm.

There needs to be more of this pairing seriously

Ignore the two trolls right above me, the first half of this was great. It's obvious that you take great care in your writing, and watching the characters interact in such a casual way was entertaining. The second part, as others have said, seemed rushed and could definitely use some balancing and touching up. I'd give it a 4/5, and look forward to seeing more of your work!

This is just bad. Poorly written in weeaboo speak. You use words you don't know the meaning of, and it's just... awful.

Oh man I got a headache. There are NO fullstops and this story put me to sleep on the first paragraph.

This is one hell of an Epic Fail.

Are you a virgin? It looks like it. Take a hint... Go get laid before you attempt this again >( No one wants to read your shit.

Isin´t Dizzy "slightly" out of character? or a lot, really?

The story started really good, and it was a pretty good idea to have Dizzy show up later, but it feels as if then ir became really rushed for some reason. There must have been some way to make things progress more normally, maybe with cliché and fun little things like she moving in with him for some reason, maybe something happened to her apartment, like a fire, and thats why she was late? If your apartment caught fire you would definitively be late to a party, then she could show up and ask if she could live with him for a bit. He could of course do the gentleman thing and invite her in. Que to seeing Dizzy in the bath by accident, or walking around in his shirts, sharing breakfast/meals/time together, and after a couple of days, maybe experiment/cuddle in the couch while watching a movie or something like that.

Is just... the story started so very good, and then degraded faster than the Evony online advertising.

To see how tacky and bad those advertisements are, check this http://forum.rpg.net/showthread.php?t=462821

This is how bad, and how fast, the story went downhill. It stayed surprisingly sweet and cute, but Dizzy was forced and twisted out of character to make it happen, which was a shame.

The first part of the story gets a ¤¤¤¤¤ stars rating, and then the second part only a ¤ star rating, and that single one only for taking the decency to actually coming through with continuing the story.

By the way, thats my real name in my email, send me a message if you would like to talk a bit and share or work in histories together. Sadly this is a new computer and I lost my old ones, but i´m sure ill start writting again soon.

PD: It was pretty cool to see Sol and Johnny drinking together.

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Yiou do play GG right?

*laughs* BURI is a boy :P I didn't know if you didn't know that or if Ky didn't know that....

*doesn't know if the cop/king/leader/ knows that because she hasn't play story mode in the last GG fighting game...*

Well besides some ooc (hahahah....) it's actually kinda nice...

I'm just...a yaoi fan but I actually found it funny as hell that Ky was with Dizzy XD I personally didn't want him with Jam and I was like 'In your FACE FANS!'

Still uh....more chapters?

and this is how Sin was born lol

...ummm...I actually want to see more of this couple, or even with Dizzy and King Ky (*laughs at the thought of king Ky)

Still good lemon; a lot better than most and it actually shows your work through it. Keep up the good job.