rate_review Reviews

Awesome, awesome story. I really loved how Zelda ended up being "taught" who she was by the guard. I really hope you write further chapters; maybe have her become conflicted and try to escape, only to be caught and returned to the brothel. And maybe have her be used by Ingo, or Mido, or random unpleasant men as she becomes more addicted.

Great story, man. The sex was steamy and I'm always glad to see smut where the girl is primary. My only concern, as with the person before me, is dialogue. While it stretches the page out a little, it becomes much more coherent to read when it's broken up. Aside from that, I look forward to seeing what else you muster.

keep going... need I say more?

Nice. My only critisism is that the character dialogue is kinda squished into the paragraphs. Needs more spaces. Other than that it's very good.

Is this a oneshot, or are you writing more?