rate_review Reviews

Please Update with a Deathclaw scene soon.

i would love to ask you to do a human/mutant since theres not enough out there and logically a mutant is massive but your writing description sucks.

This story has improved greatly since I reviewed it the first time! I really hope you continue; the Fallout 3 section is WAAAAAY too empty!

You fail biology. Forever.

i like it ive bene gollowing it ever sence you updated i thought it was inacative but i ahve to say i was realy happy when i saw it was updated im into that kinda kink its a bit sadistic but tis only a fantsy lol but i like how its going i cant wait to see wich creatures next

got to say love the new chapter heh cant wait to see the pregnacy lol i want to see her knocked up by a supermutant or a centaur or something lol could be interesting

Love this fic so much want MOAR!!$

They gave her new hips and a thicker uterus, but forgot to take out her hymen?

Interesting idea, though. Seems like something Vault Tech would do, considering.

I have to be honest. I could not get through the first sentence of your story without becoming confused about the whole thing. You need to format your story a whole lot better before anyone can understand what the heck is going on. There needs to be a line between paragraphs and when two people are speaking, their dialogue should never be in the same paragraph. Separate their speech so that we know who said what to whom. I don't do this to flame or be mean in any way. You need either a good proof reader or a beta to point out the mistakes so you can learn from them.

I think this story has potential, but you need to hit the enter key every once and a while; without spacing, it makes it really hard to read this story.