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Love it, except for the rape...please update?

Oh wow, I didn't expect there to be a 'to be continued' after that bit. I hope there's some more Erol violence, There needs to be more fanfiction of him. Good job, I really like this fic. I can't think of much to say about this fic other than its pretty great. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

^-^ Im quite enjoying this story, Ive only read up to half of chapter 4, but I was suddenly struck with the insperation to write a review (which is rare for me cuz im lazy XD) Anyway, the point of writing this was to say your doing an awesome job! dont stop, youve inspired me to make an amv, this fic reminded me of the song Quote by Evans Blue, if youve never heard it, I highly suggest you take a listen. now I must go read the rest n.n

I read the first couple of chapters of this story and noticed something. You only have 3 reviews right now! Well, I thoght to myself, that is no way to respect this beautiful story and author! Author's need feedback to know that their work is appreciated and to encourage them to persevere! So, I decided to create an AFF acount and lavish you with praise! I probably won't get through all 5 chapters tonight since I do need to be up at 5:30 am, but by George I'm going to try! Heh, I'm gonna go ahead and start reading again, and review each chapter (even the one's I've already read, cuz damnit, you need love!) so I'll just leave you alone for now...

Chapter 2 down! I'm curious as to Daxter's little talking to himself habit... is that gonna be permanent? I kinda get why they do it in movies, seeings how we can't be in their heads, but in stories, we CAN be with them in thier thoughts, so I don't get why character's in stories do it... Just a pet peeve of mine, sorry... Anywho, another great chapter! Most authors keep Daxter's angst level to a minimum, saving him for the comic relief in Jak's life, which, don't get me wrong, I think is incredibly important and vital, but it's nice to see Daxter's worries in depth. Great job!

Mmm, I have to be honest here, I think I prefere Jak's point of view. Nothing against Dax, I love the little furball, but Jak's POV seemed more... real, I guess. Haha, maybe because he wasn't talking out loud to himself (I really don't know why that bothers me so much...)! Okay, serious reviewer time. I think this is the first fic I've read where Dark Jak is an entirely seperate being from Jak. Normally, authors portray Dark Jak as this animalistic instinct that resides within Jak, and is comprised of just every horrible emotion he's ever felt turned into a part of himslef he can't control. Kind of like a real life dissociotive disorder, a coping method made to deal with what he had to endure, but he lost control of it. When I read your take on it, it's almost like the Dark Eco is a sentiant being feeding off of Jak's pain... I think I like it! Sorry, I'm over analysing and babbling all at once. Yay, multitasking! Anyway, still loving it, on with the show!

Heh, okay, so Daxter's talking to himself habbit was a bit more tolerable in this chapter seeings how it was more like nervous ramblings than talking for no reason... I even found it amusing! Torpedos, haha... Moving on, I read your reviewer replies and am very, very, very pleased to hear that you like happy endings! Seeings how I'm an unbalanced emotional wreck, sad endings really get to me... I can't think about any sad ending I've read for at least a couple days afterward just because I get depressed over it! How pathetic is that? Happy endings for the win! On another note, I must complement you even more, because my friend, you have a way with sick and demented scenes! Absolutely fantastic. I'm freaking cringing along with Jak over here! Kudos! Okay, well, I'm gonna freaking just go ahead a read the last chapter even though I should really be getting to bed... you evil temptress... assuming your a girl... why do people assume fanfiction writers are female? Sorry, rambling again, I'll go...

Wow... Dark Eco enima... points for creativity on that one, you twisted, twisted girl... And yeah, just so you know, this is still awesome and I think I'm in love with you. We're getting married, just so you know. Spring wedding, I think... Haha, okay, seriously now, your writing just seems to be getting better with every chapter! I'm both sad and relieved that there are no other chapters up right now because that means I can finally go to bed! Who needs sleep, any way. Once again, you have the magic touch with these violent, tormented scenes, I don't think I can infate your ego any further in that area! Well, I'm about to pass out on the keyboard so I'm going to take my leave and am axiously awaiting the next chapter! Tootles! (Did I really just say tootles? Yeah, it's time to go to bed...)

Sorry, my brain was a bit frazzled from exams that day; it was a different author that wrote "Something More". Anyway, W00T, another good, if a teensy bit creepy, chapter. Erol is seriously messed up... Another thing I'vr noticed is besides writing a great story, your writing is almost flawless. I only noticed two mistakes, and they were just two words that were missing a period. FOR SHAME! :P

Aww... poor boys! This is sad, but also good. I hope everything works out for them soon!