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right i like it pretty good story so far only jsut read the first chapter tho but still i like it none of the PWP i see a lot lateley only the second hm fic i read but i like it ill tell you what i think evry 5 chaps or so i right like 5 reviews but i say a lot lol

right on chap five now a bit short on the chapters i dont mind tis good n all however i sugest make em longer 26 chapters caught my eye but if they were a few paragraphs shorter id leave thats what i hate next to PWP is many chapters to get your atention adn then 6 paragraph chapters but tis okay yours aint bad and besides i might be spoiled reading 10k word fics lol however i like the bit about anns cooking lol anoutehr sugestion put a little more into chapters not only to amke em longer but mroe intersting

just took the time to read your profile and yes i do see why they cally ou the lemon queen that was a very beaufitul lemon lol however the normal chapters that cover the day to day things seem to be a little rough and i was wondering if youd want some help with those id beta for you or give you my input on a chapter if you want heres my e-mail mike_compeau@hotmail.com id realy like to help but yea i dont review this much usaly but this whole section is lacking on reveiws so ill put mine in lol anything but yaoi that is lol

jsut read cahpter ten and YA FERGOT TEH BLUE FEATHER! lol its no biggie but i love my HM games i own almost all of them ds gba gamcube lol all of em hehe but i have no quames with it tis a beautiful story i absoulutly love it

love it love it LOVE IT! jsut read chap 29 my only problem with it now is that you havent introduced a child yet always happens in game and it be nice to see here to cliif and claires kid that is