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Loved it!! Can't wait for the next update, but you really need to find a Beta to check your work (finding your own mistakes can be really hard sometimes). Great work and look forward to more:)

Man, that’s fantastic. You need some copy editing help, but the writing itself is very good. I love how you’ve got Nero still in character even when he’s horny out of his mind. Too many authors don’t handle that well.

Aside from some little spellcheck accidents (easily fixed by just going slower using it), your two biggest problems are as follows;

Capitalization 101: first letter of the first word in a sentence is capitalized. Proper nouns (names of specific people, places, things, and ideas) are also capitalized. Otherwise, don't capitalize it.

Your = thing belonging to you. You’re = you are.

Well, Vergil has both eldest-right and first claimer’s right. Also, I don’t think Dante would have asked if he wasn’t willing to be second. On the other hand, Nero’s made it clear that as hormonally crazed as he is at the moment, he’s not out of the game altogether. And it occurs to me that Nero might prefer Dante, for familiarity if nothing else.

I was going to offer to Betta, but it looks like everyone and their monkey is offering already. I'll offer anyway though, just because I'd love first dibs on reading it :)

Wow, I'm intrigued! I can't wait until the next chapter. I think perhaps further explanation of how Vergil is in the dream, or something like that, would make it more interesting (later on, of course). Also, if you'd like, I could be a beta...? Haha, I've never done it before, but I could fix the mistakes in here.

It was good BUT there were some spelling mistakes like instead of saying "funny" it was fully? so ya but other then a few silly spelling mistakes it was hot! Both at the same time sounds hot BTW Nero can handle it hes a big boy. xD