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August 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
You walked a very fine line here, and I would call it a rousing success. I like snarky Link, and it's fun watching him rub off on stuffy-pants Sheik. The occasional breaking of the fourth wall (such as the Organelle incident), while not ordinarily my preference in this sort of story, still feel refreshing coming from Link. And most importantly, the framework of the familiar story works well to bring the heroes together without making their romance seem forced. You did an excellent job of including only the occasional bit of gameplay without making it feel like a drudging walkthrough (though now that I think of it, Lemon Walkthrough is a genre that should totally exist even if it would be terrible).
Wih regards to the lemon scenes, you have an excellent sense of what to portray directly and what to imply. The feeling is certainly more romantic than explicit and it suits the characters and the story. The only thing I might suggest is focusing a little more (than you already do, which is quite good already) on the characters feelings about what is happening, and the sensations and reactions. What people do at such moments is always less interesting (to me anyway) than what this makes them feel, be that simply enjoyment or a panicked reconstruction of their sense of self in light of that attraction. You do this so much already, however, that I found it quite enjoyable! Thanks for a great read!
And I surely do hope for a sequel!
Wih regards to the lemon scenes, you have an excellent sense of what to portray directly and what to imply. The feeling is certainly more romantic than explicit and it suits the characters and the story. The only thing I might suggest is focusing a little more (than you already do, which is quite good already) on the characters feelings about what is happening, and the sensations and reactions. What people do at such moments is always less interesting (to me anyway) than what this makes them feel, be that simply enjoyment or a panicked reconstruction of their sense of self in light of that attraction. You do this so much already, however, that I found it quite enjoyable! Thanks for a great read!
And I surely do hope for a sequel!
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February 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! This has to be pretty much the best story I've ever read. I've spent hours reading this through from beginning to end and I'm very sad that it's over. Though I'm so very satisfied with the read. You should be proud of how well this story came out. Kudos.
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December 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sequel = YESPLEASE
Best fic I've read in a long time. *goes to look at other fics by you*
Best fic I've read in a long time. *goes to look at other fics by you*
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June 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to thank you for writing such a great story. I've been reading on it every night for the past few nights, and really enjoyed it, sometimes staying up a couple hours later than I planned. Also your character development is outstanding! I really enjoyed how you made the familiar story of OoT your own. I really hope you write that sequal. PLEASE!?!?!?!?!
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June 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Reading this was like reading a very well thought-out and executed novel. I bow before your sheer awesomeness and hope that someday I'm half as good at character and plot development as you are.
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November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I read it AGAIN! Still love it ^^
I reccommend searching "HJ Bender" in google and reading "soul shadow" in his fanfiction.net account. Also, Kasuto.net is FULL of amazing stories all on Zelda series, the best ones being by Kasuto. "Ambrosia Empire" in the original section of AFF.net is REALLY good to! Theres to versions of Ambrosia Empire and i love them both. And "pleasure Slave" in the anime section (cardcapter Sakura) is great!
I wouldnt recommend them if i didnt absolutly love each and every one of them so their definetly worth checking out! ^^
I reccommend searching "HJ Bender" in google and reading "soul shadow" in his fanfiction.net account. Also, Kasuto.net is FULL of amazing stories all on Zelda series, the best ones being by Kasuto. "Ambrosia Empire" in the original section of AFF.net is REALLY good to! Theres to versions of Ambrosia Empire and i love them both. And "pleasure Slave" in the anime section (cardcapter Sakura) is great!
I wouldnt recommend them if i didnt absolutly love each and every one of them so their definetly worth checking out! ^^
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July 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the most epic fanfictions I have read in all my life. I adore the Link x Sheik pairing. And for you to re-write the whole OoT with the twist of them being together, absolutely wonderful!
I could probably go on and on about every small little thing in this fic that I found lovely. You writing is superb!
I could probably go on and on about every small little thing in this fic that I found lovely. You writing is superb!
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July 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This has to be the most AMAZING fan fiction I have ever read. This goes just beyond all the LoZ fics I've read, but has surpassed everything! This story was so beautiful and amazing, my mind is permanently warped now to believe that THIS really happened in Ocarina of Time behind the scenes. I actually started playing it again after reading this! I mean, whoa! My life has been utter shit up to this point, but I've just been so elated after this that I still believe that it's possible for two people to be happy together. Needless to say, this story has changed my dark insignificant life.
Thank you.
Thank you.
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March 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was wonderful. Trully, I've no words left to describe how beautiful and greatly appreciated this story was. You're a wonderful author and should be extremely proud of this little masterpiece. I'll keep an eye on your works and definately look forward to the sequel if you post it. ^_^
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March 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*APLAUSE APLAUSE* BRAVOOO!!~
loved it, sad that the stories ending but im happy your making a sequel ^^
loved it, sad that the stories ending but im happy your making a sequel ^^