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September 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow...what a great story! Not a Porn Without Plot in any sense. You did a great job with this wonderful pairing. Yes, there were some minor mistakes--like the all-too-common confusion of "brazier" and "brassiere" (the latter, not the former, is the garment), but this is just nitpicking on my part.
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July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit. I've never read a fic so craftily well written. I'm just blown away, I can't express it. You sir, win so much for this. This has made my day.
AMAZING job. Props to you.
AMAZING job. Props to you.
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July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lovely. I love how your portrayed Nephanee's accent. Such a HICK XD XD
But it's good. I'm glad to see heather got her chance with her in this story <3
But it's good. I'm glad to see heather got her chance with her in this story <3
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July 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good. And with a pairing that so obviously needed to be written to boot.
However...
Use your Enter key more often, especially around dialogue. Now it all looks a bit clunky and cluttered.
However...
Use your Enter key more often, especially around dialogue. Now it all looks a bit clunky and cluttered.