rate_review Reviews

I rather enjoy the way that the different chapters, for the most part, take on a different type of story. I feel that the Zelos/Colette part was perhaps a little more strained than the others. The interlude also seemed a bit rushed, but that's probably because it was an interlude and it had a considerable number of characters. The ideas put forth by Regal in the fourth chapter was an excellent step in making it a good story. I would be anxious to read more.

nice, I'd like to see more from you.

Another well writen chapter, I'd like to see another one.

holy hell this is a fun story.

really is a great story.

Yeah, keep going! I like how you build up to each encounter with some good dialogue between the characters before. Keep it up, because I really like that "are they gonna do it? are they gonna do it?" feeling I have in each of these chapters.

I do agree with the last reviewer, though, who said that the Zelos/Colette thing didn't quite make sense. I mean, plenty of fics around here give these characters a totally different personality, but seeing these things right after Zelos is his normal suave self and Colette is her normal unassertive, gentle self didn't really convince me. Don't get me wrong, I like "spanking" and D/s as much as the next reader does, but you'd prepared me beforehand for something similar to the first chapter, more sensual and less...animalistic, shall I say.

I hope that made sense. Anyway, carry on!

Wow, I... actually don't have anything negative to say about this. It's fairly solid overall. The Summon Spirit chapter was a bit sparse compared to the others, but since it was an interlude I'll be generous enough to forgive you. ;)

The only real complaint I have is that Zelos/Colette D/s thing wasn't properly developed enough, in my opinion, and therefore seriously strained credibility. Oh, and that there's not enough yuri. But, really, that's not much of a complaint.

In any case, keep it up.