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July 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story is entertaining and its set during my favorite part in the RE series the raccoon city outbreak but could you tell me where you are going with this story **no offense intended** in later chapters i mean will you write of their entire escape through the city or something similar just give me an idea of what i should expect
P.S about your console problem i already have an XBOX360 Elite and a 60GB PS3 and to tell you the truth i love them both but i would have to reccomend getting a PS3 it gives a much better and easier experience and the system only gets better while the XBOX is reaching its limit unfortunately....if you do take my advice my username on PS3 network is chapterblack...add me as a friend to start you off or just tell me your username and i'll add you
P.S about your console problem i already have an XBOX360 Elite and a 60GB PS3 and to tell you the truth i love them both but i would have to reccomend getting a PS3 it gives a much better and easier experience and the system only gets better while the XBOX is reaching its limit unfortunately....if you do take my advice my username on PS3 network is chapterblack...add me as a friend to start you off or just tell me your username and i'll add you
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July 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Everybody needs to start somewhere in writing, but you've got to make more paragraphs. Either when somebody new starts speaking or when another major event starts taking place. Your story might be something good, but several people would rather not torture themselves attempting to work through the wall of text.
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July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You must start a new paragraph when a new person begins speaking. This is not optional.
Your story is nearly impossible to read.
Your story is nearly impossible to read.