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by Lukylady123

person Max
schedule September 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome to see another chapter in, and at long last Leon kicks ass for great justice once again (god I need to play that game again now... dammit)

As always, continue the great story (though I was confused by Leon's "soft reply" at the end, maybe I'm just reading it wrong)

Max
person CombatDoc19
schedule September 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is the best Resident Evil romance fic ever..keep it up!!
person Sarcasmic
schedule September 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
MOAR
need more.
person Max
schedule September 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see a new chapters up in the story, my perseverence paid off :)

Can't wait til Leon gets back to protecting Ashley, and hopefully you get to write the next chapter quick.

Good luck
person Anon
schedule September 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is the best resident evil fanfiction I've read. Keep up the good work!
person James
schedule August 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Probably one of the better post-RE4 fics I've encountered. Nicely emotive, although it can get a bit bogged down in places. One little nitpick - RE4 takes place over a single night. Leon comes to the village in the afternoon, and he's leaving the island with Ashley the following morning. Just a small quibble.
Nice work so far, keep it up!
person Max
schedule August 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice to see another chapter up. Good plot development, I'm looking forward to them meeting, I assume the wait'll be worth it.

Couple editing things you might wanna consider:
In the beginning you have a few spelling and punctuation errors. Not many but one is all it takes to break me out of the story a little anyways.
Seems like you overuse the term "ordeal" in Ashley's bit.
lastly, it's tabasco sauce, not tobacco sauce :P

Keep up the good work :)
person Max
schedule July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter, keep it up!

Quick note: actually after a mission, while giving a report on its success/failure, it's a debriefing, not a briefing. :D

I look forward to moar.
person DST
schedule July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story is coming along quite nicely. I like the way you're building up the feelings between Leon/Ashley without them being in each others presence. Very well done!
person Max
schedule July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good story here, nice emotions.

Beyond a few minor spelling and grammatical glitches the new chapter looks good. Can't wait to see where it goes.