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Take as long as you like! I'd rather the chapters are quality rather than rushed.

Hi again. I like that Mission compared Carth and Orin to her and Big Z. And Orin's response is pretty funny and well phrased heh.
And also, I'm glad there wasn't a lot of "Oh, my dashing soldier is well again" business. Slap a medpac on him and go. It's how it should be. Good scene.
It's interesting Orin remembers but doesn't remember Canderous. I like the "who is he and why doesn't he remember me" bit.
Solid chapter. Can't wait for the next one. And I think it's masterful how you've woven the in game dialogue into action sequences that make sense, since you don't really stop mid game for a chat without reason.
I agree that you can't rush the sex scenes, and am glad you haven't sacrificed telling your story for rushing to the naughty bits.

I approve of the righteous angry on Orin's part, aka when she says "oh that's fucking it". Lol. A little anger is good in a battle, right? I like how she goes crazy when Carth gets hurt, despite some serious tension between them. She does care. And also, how you explain there's a case of vials, versus the games kind of explaination of, well, there might be one on the corpse, is good. You explain the subtext of the game very well.
Looking forward to your next chapter.

Hi there. I read all of your ficcie last night, and bam, today, a new chapter. You rock. I like that there's more subtext to what they're saying to each other than in the actual game. I'm interested in Carth and Orin's relationship. I'm anticipating Orin just smacking him down at some point, and them mebbe hot smex? But I'm not rushing you. This is by far the best walk through I've seen. I especially liked the last line.
Anyway, I hope you keep updating. If I can do anything to help you, if you even get writers block (which doesn't seem like a problem), I'd be happy to help. Anything to keep the chappies coming.
Thanks for posting.