rate_review Reviews

Impressive, as always. You've captured Mathias rather nicely, I'd always pictured him as something like this. Truth be told, he reminds me somewhat of one of my own characters from a piece of original fiction. In any event, his personality was dead on the mark, and the shounen-ai lover within me had always suspected that all Mathias really wanted was Leon. I can only assume the voice Mathias is communicating with is Walter, though I'd assumed it to be Death in the beginning. As usual, I enjoyed the story, and anxiously await the next chapter. You're doing well.

Such a great chapter, I'm so happy you updated. You're story is great.

Wow.. I really enjoyed reading that. You are a great writer and I hope to read more from you soon. You actually made me cry

Yay, an update & such a lovely chapter too. Love how the relationship is panning out, very sad & sweet.

Can't wait to see what Mathias's reaction to Leon is...specially if he thinks they're sleeping together!

Can't put a particularly long review in now, but I will say that I've always thought the two of them would be cute together, and you've pulled it off well. Good luck with the rest, and I anticipate seeing what's causing Joachim's "fits."

First, I apologize for the terribly late review, I try to review stories and chapters within 24 hours of publishing, but the site decided to switch to pong mode right as I hit submit, and I've been lazy since then...

Joachim and Leon would make an adorable couple; I've always thought so even after first playing through LoI (though, my mind tends to twist ideas of any two good-looking characters into all sorts of bizarre combinations). I was grinning by the end of the story, Leon's squirming like a toad, when he would probably just smile and laugh were it anyone *else,* which of course can only mean the feelings are on some level mutual.

A nice ending, by the way, I xD'd when Joachim mentioned the bath.

Again, I liked it. Nothing noticeably odd, but then, I've been awake for 36 hours, so I wouldn't really know. I enjoyed it as usual, I'm glad you decided to continue.

Mhmmm,yes you should write more, write like 10 chapters more!! Absolutly love how you have them act/think. The tasty blood & Host idea was a good explantion. Hoping for more naughty "dreams" courtesy of the lovely vampire!

This is really well-written and in character, as far as I can tell. Please keep up with this story, I've enjoyed it so far and I'm very anxious about what's going to come next. You really are a good writer, and this story is much better than any other ones I've read for Lament of Innocence. Please, please keep writing this!

I liked this one even more than the last. Leon and Joachim have always seemed like they would get along together, yet finding FF's that suit both their personalities is difficult. You've pulled it off quite well, though, and I commend you for that. The only minor complaint I have is that you used "wretched fool" three times in a row, which read a bit odd to me. It's the term he uses in the game, I know, but it sounded strange to hear it so often so close together. Again, I look forward to the next chapter.