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January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is a great Mass Effect story, I little bit of jumping here and there but that is alright however I do have one question what happen to Shiala? The asari that was on Feros.
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April 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
dude this story is awesome, cant wait for the next chapter. i love how you get most of the storyline yet u dont focus on too much detail on the missions themselves
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March 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is really good! I'm a big fan of the game and it's good to see you doing it justice.
Keep writing, can't wait for the next update.
Keep writing, can't wait for the next update.
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November 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great stuff I do hope the naxt does not take as long.
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October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great mass effect fic. Extremely well written and I want more! Lol. Keep writing, can't wait to see more
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October 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story so far. I can't wait to see what happens next because to be honest I hated this part of the game.
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September 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's pretty interesting to see someone write a story about the game. You switched tenses a couple times at the end in the Thorian's lair. Another thing that bothered me was John knew they were Asari Clones. I know in the game it tells you when you attack them, but he wouldn't know they were clones right away.
Anyway, I enjoyed the story, but there were a few small things that annoyed me.
Anyway, I enjoyed the story, but there were a few small things that annoyed me.
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September 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good points Drunkasaurus Rex! I fixed some of the tense errors at the end of the previous chapter, and I'll give it another read through soon... As for the asari clones issue. It is a valid point, ALTHOUGH, scientifically speaking any non-sexual and non-hereditary reproduction is cloning. The Thorian could only make clones of asari since they are not the same species nor are they created through any hereditary system. That said, I did delete the erroneous uses of the word clone. Thanks for the reviews!
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September 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story. Keep going.
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September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really good work.