rate_review Reviews

Many of the descriptions are way too wordy and unnecessary. It almost ruined it for me to be honest.

It's too bad this won't ever be finished. Probably because the author got tired of thinking up 5 adjectives for every other sentence.

Just wanted to sat that I hope you continue this story as it was one of my favourites. And hopefully you will put the older chapters back up as I really enjoyed them too. Anyway keep up the good work and hopefully there will be an update soon :)

Out of all te resident evil stories on aft this Is by far my favorite. The plot the monster you do it so well I look foreword to seeing on how you are going to redo this story good luck eit it

Great to see the revised version going back up, but I miss the older version as well. Is there somewhere to see them while you're uploading these? Which are good too but I like both.

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The revision really tells the story better, I'm getting a much clearer setting in mind as opposed to the old one where I was, admittedly, a little in the dark at times. Looking forward to the future chapters!

hey i just was wondering if you are still working on this cause i read it before you started revising and it was pretty good, and i honestly like the fact that you have a plot in this instead of just the usual straight forward story, you know?

Sweet, I can't wait to read the rewrites.

There was a lot of purple prose in that first chapter. The scenes were easy to read, but it felt like there was quite a bit of superfluous description, especially in the sex scene.

Other than that, though, I have no objections to your story thus far.

Well done, very well done overall. You must proofread the hell out of these things before you put them up. I'm an English grad and normally I catch the odd error reading through stories like this. Kinda like my nails on a chalk board. Here? Nothing. Good flow, well written, and entertaining as all hell. In terms of suggestions or preferences for the next chapter, for me that will depend on the number of zombies present. If there's only two, then at some point I'd like to see Rebecca stuck between them, like a medic on a spit so to speak. One fucking her from behind (hole optional), and her blowing the other one. If there's three, well, three zombies, three holes seems like good math to me, and the makings for a good old triple team. Another possibility is her on her back, sucking one, fucking the other and maybe masturbating or tit fucking the third? But all this is assuming they jump her at the same time. You did say mutants don't play nice together so we'll see.

On another note, I just wanted to say thank you for allowing and encouraging reader reviews. Some authors get offended or angry when others point out errors. The fact that you are inviting our critiques means you want to improve and that you care what your readers think. Thanks for that. Great work so far and keep it up. Can't wait till you get to Jill Valentine. That's gonna be hot. ...and I've gotta ask, any guesses on a timeframe for the next chapter? Sorry, just had to. Looking forward to more.