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February 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hah, this is just adorable! "Rowrr?" "Rowrr!" haha this about the awesomest representation of Jak's dark from I've read yet! I wonder when Dax'll finally catch on...
eagerly awaiting more!
eagerly awaiting more!
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February 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This is really inventive and fun.
Having very recently read the ottsel version, I've had a chance to appreciate some of the subtler differences here. I like that Dax is "the safest little rebel," and I have high hopes for this one.
You've got three fics on here for this fandom. How does THAT feel? I wish I were half as productive. :) As always, you did a good job sucking the reader in and making it real. ;_; The end of it is tormenting. The quickly-dismissed notion that "maybe this is weird." MUST HAVE MOAR!
<3 Good Job!
Sej
Having very recently read the ottsel version, I've had a chance to appreciate some of the subtler differences here. I like that Dax is "the safest little rebel," and I have high hopes for this one.
You've got three fics on here for this fandom. How does THAT feel? I wish I were half as productive. :) As always, you did a good job sucking the reader in and making it real. ;_; The end of it is tormenting. The quickly-dismissed notion that "maybe this is weird." MUST HAVE MOAR!
<3 Good Job!
Sej
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February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed the comical aspects of this one. I love Dark and you make him so extra-lovable! Awesome writing skills, as usual!
Excited for part two. (Loved the outtakes too)
MJ
Excited for part two. (Loved the outtakes too)
MJ
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February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think you drowned my need for warm and fluffiness too for awhile. No not really, who I'm kidding, I could never get enough of that! XD
I'm glad you didn't let Dark Jak get too "dark" if you know what I mean. He should be mean and nasty but not to his dear Dax. He's a bit too creepy in the fics were he practically rapes or almost kills Daxter, Jak wouldn't do that even when affected by dark eco. I think he's still there underneath it all. Although I do love the last dialogues, "We can fix that, you know," lol! Run away, Dax! XD He's so lucky that's not part of the real story!
"I need a bandage, ya idiot, not you slobberin’ all over me!" Haha, Jak is just trying his best, poor thing is not very appreciated. He’s like a big cute dog in this, love it! :D It's adorable that even though he is Dark Jak you made him all insecure and anxious.
As you can tell I think it's great so far, I can't wait to read more! And now I feel bad for not being more productive myself. *Goes and writes madly on my story.* Chapter two was being a bitch and I had to re-write some parts but I think I'm back on track again, yay! :)
I'm glad you didn't let Dark Jak get too "dark" if you know what I mean. He should be mean and nasty but not to his dear Dax. He's a bit too creepy in the fics were he practically rapes or almost kills Daxter, Jak wouldn't do that even when affected by dark eco. I think he's still there underneath it all. Although I do love the last dialogues, "We can fix that, you know," lol! Run away, Dax! XD He's so lucky that's not part of the real story!
"I need a bandage, ya idiot, not you slobberin’ all over me!" Haha, Jak is just trying his best, poor thing is not very appreciated. He’s like a big cute dog in this, love it! :D It's adorable that even though he is Dark Jak you made him all insecure and anxious.
As you can tell I think it's great so far, I can't wait to read more! And now I feel bad for not being more productive myself. *Goes and writes madly on my story.* Chapter two was being a bitch and I had to re-write some parts but I think I'm back on track again, yay! :)
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February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I created an account just so that I could review your stories. XD
This story is so interesting. It's interesting because you could totally pull this off as a 1-chapter with Dax as an ottsel, or the other way around with yaoi. Your explanation of the blast and subsequent events were quick but handled really well. Half of the stuff Dark was doing had me snickering out loud too. XD
Eagerly awaiting your next update!
This story is so interesting. It's interesting because you could totally pull this off as a 1-chapter with Dax as an ottsel, or the other way around with yaoi. Your explanation of the blast and subsequent events were quick but handled really well. Half of the stuff Dark was doing had me snickering out loud too. XD
Eagerly awaiting your next update!