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by sillyneko345

person PCPisgood
schedule March 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Actually, someone CAN claim the title of this chapter. Dark Energy is the name of the last chapter in the game "Half Life 2." :3
person Csi Forsythe
schedule October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love you and this fic! I've nothing else coherent to say.
person Csi Forsythe
schedule October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ah . . . I'm getting ready to go to bed so I can only review the first chapter. Let's see . . .

"//This is it,// Daxter thought with sickening clarity, . . . //This is where I’m maimed by my best friend, who’ll come to sooner or later with blood an’ gore all over him and won’t know what he did…//" I almost felt bad for Dax. That had to be gut-wrenching. 'I'm gonna die and it'll be my best friend's fault.' That would've sucked.

"Rather than flashing his threat display to an empty expanse of room, Jak was suddenly bending to gaze very closely at the figure in his arms." Just . . . lol . . . in so many ways.

" . . . as a former small furry animal, I darn well ought’a know when I’m bein’ hunted. And right now I’m not on the menu." I want to see these escapades! I'll bet he screams prettily in them.

"I mean, it’s not like anybody but Jak’d miss me in the first place… Damn it. Even human again they all think I’m worthless…//" My inner fangirl wanted to hug him. However, the bitch wisely didn't attempt to touch Jak's propert - umm, friend.

"Without preamble Jak flopped onto the improvised nest. There was a stretch and a contented sigh as he settled in, peering out of what was certainly his new safe zone." I've told you this before, but it must be repeated - your scenes are so easy to visualize and I love you for it.

I love how Jak keeps following Dax around. I know he's doing it to protect Dax and keep an eye on him, but it's just so cute. And how Jak keeps rowring? Priceless. All of a sudden, I feel a need to keep a Dark Jak along side Ottsel Dex in my closet. What slavery? What dark, deadly aura emanating from my room, threatening to rip me limb from limb?

And, of course, to top things off, the rectifying of virginity - tap that ass Jak!

In conclusion: I LOVE YOU.

P.S. CAPTCHA says 'mouth-to-mouth regional'. I think it's been reading your fics as well.
person Branny
schedule August 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh this was wonderful! I except nothing less from you Robin. xD

I again laughed through this story, I always love how you write for Daxter! From the 'charming' way he talks to his thoughts. He's so tormented by his lustful inner feelings for his greeny blonde haired friend! Teehee!

Again your an amazing writer and I thoroughly enjoy reading your stories of awesomeness! I'm sad to actually finish them since I don't want them to end. Oh well. ^^;

Keep up the good work! Can't wait to see the next story your naughty head comes up with! xDD
person Ezj
schedule April 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
//There’s nothing wrong with buddy sex, there’s nothing wrong with buddy sex,//

“I couldn’t find my gun.”

You take care’a the metalheads… I’ll bring the blanket?”

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Those must be the most hilarious lines I've ever read. I didn't know if I should
laugh my ass of or drool at the two hot boys smexing it up 'drools pervertedly'.

(I'll altered between both... Which was akward with all my friends playing video games
beside me giving me funny looks... I wern't acting that strange...)

Anyhow it's definetly a story I'll recommend to all perverts I know (which seem to be all i know...)
and hoping even if you wont continnue this you'll write more and more stories ^_^

Theres to little J&D out there and you write them so damn good...
(okay pathetic review but that's the best I can do ^^''')
person Sione
schedule April 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww, but you can’t take Daxie all by yourself, you gotta share the little bundle of cuteness!

This is a lovely ending to your story, you had me a bit worried there for awhile about how the heck they were going to prepare Daxter. Jak didn’t exactly have the right fingers for it at the moment, and I couldn’t imagine him taking Daxter without preparation, that would have been too painful for the poor thing. I’m glad to see that the big guy solved it with a good humping, haha. Poor Daxter, it must have felt a bit humiliating, but we all know he loved it. XD

Daxter is dark Jak’s bitch, lol. Actually, Jak, I think it’s the other way around.

Sej really got to write a sequel to this, we need it!
schedule April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
;_; That. Was SO good.

Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah. I think I have to write it now because I want mooooooooooooooooore. Plus I want Jak to be like "hey, guess what? I actually really like youuuuuuuuuuuuuu, Dax, and not Keira... besides, *pats redhead's butt*, your ass is WAY cuter," or something like that. Plus... Hehehehe. You could always have an enemy suprise attack at just the right moment so Jak's guard is down and he's getting undressed or something so there's space between them and then a monster (lol I didn't even bother to name a specific enemy) pops out of nowhere headed for Dax, who is yet unaware, and out pops Dark Jak again. Just to let that continue in any way it would.

Not that we don't want regular Jak lovin'. We want. ;_; And Sig's reaction?! Oh me, oh my--won't that be a pleasure to write.

And I must say, nomatter how many times I read it, the image of Dax demonstrating Keira's boobs is so adorable and funny!

Man... That chapter is so good. Oh and you're very right about cleaning up that sort of messiness. It trickles wherever it wants to and then dries up really quickly. After a point, you just need a hot bath to get it all out. I do love PD because it speaks to some things that I hold especially close to my heart. Desperation for one. Passionate desperation, and I don't mean in an emotionally sad way. I just looooove to see these two unable to hold back and just trying things out despite the uncertainties.

And it's important that Jak remembered. I really liked that. Even though the things running through Dark's mind are largely insinuated, it's nice to hear Jak actually admit to them. Besides, it's just another form of torture. :p He really can't say no to that cute little redhead. I'm personally dying to write more teasing. I want Dax to lean next to Jak's ear while he trails his hands wherever his whims might take them and start whispering stuff like "tell me what you want"--and it has to have an element of cockiness to it, too, because even though Jak is well aware of his friend's inexperience, he's also falling prey to the subtle dominance that Dax can sometimes emit.

The combination of this private, shy, hero-character and his loud-mouthed and impatient best friend is just impossible to hate. Besides. Dax is right. The girls WOULD think that was hot.

^.^ Kudos, kudos. Time to start working on my projects again (*gasp* there's an 's' on the end of that p-word!). Great job!
schedule April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
heheh your outtakes made me laugh and I swear I will get to work on that beer can drawing as i seem to have gotten my artistic prowess back. I will continue to read now and review the others so you know I actually read them.
schedule April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh yay smex in next chapter going to read now. this one was cute and funny by the way I might just have to draw somehting from this one too. ^_^
schedule April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YAAAAAAAAAAY! You did it you did it you wrote porn!! *throws confetti* hehe good job Meg I am very proud of you for getting over that fear and see I went and read it like i promised hehe maybe the next one can have some actual PENETRATION hehehe have fun with that word it's a great little adjective. But anyway good job I'm proud of you.

-J-chan