rate_review Reviews

I love this story. I hope Jill and Rebecca get their revenge on Wesker (according to their expressed wishes to eliminate whoever created the S-Virus) and find someone to fuck that won't die under them. Well, what can I say, I'm the sentimental kind of pervert.
In other words, keep up the good work!

just a matter of time until tyrant...should be interesting...and theres also the spiders and chimera although youre the one deciding who apppears and i cant wait! update soon

I am really loving this story, especially the "Wesker's Reports" sections at the end.... they are just so funny sometimes with what he says compared to what the girls actually went through.

I really hope that you finish this story and then start doing more for the next chapters in the Resident Evil saga, because this story is just too good to leave as a 'one-off'.

LOL that impregnation theme is smart not to mention funny i had almost forgotten that it was possible with all their "activities" with the creatures you should use this theme again in upcoming chapters..........ad it seems like my opinion isnt mine anymore another person has suggsted you follow up this great fic with an RE2 fic and beyond

ok thats cool just one more question ...how long do you plan to make this fic....? just out of curiousity............... i only suggested adding a sequel fic after you finish this one because you were doing so damn good with an RE1 fic i dont want you to just finish ths one off qiuckly but youre the author and can do whatever you want i just thought that it'd be a good idea to make at least one sequel fic to continue this fic's ....legacy or something of the sort plus an RE2 fic could really make it easy for you to bring out your genius you should add maybe at leat 2-3 chapters for each RE sequel story but if youre tired of doing them a one shot is fine

keep going man...oh and i have three questions, will the true effects and purpose of the S and F virus be told? and is anything going to happen to jill or rebecca since they keep getting.....uhhhh, filled with a certain substance...

and finally is the F virus a replacement for the G virus if so does this mean your going to do a fic on RE2 and RE3

you just love building everything up dont you ...LOL ive been at the edge of my seat the entire time all i can say is update soon man and tell me what you think of my suggestion for the RE2 and RE3 continuations of this fic

hmmm well... very interesting to see what else will be included like the hunters or even those weird...chimeras and in the end the Tyrant LOL that'll be funny to see ..you write really good after you finish this story which i hope still has several chapters to go you should really continue with a story on RE2 and then RE3 with a similar format and plot you 've done such a good job with this one i can only imagine what those would be like you also ost chapters quickly which is great not many people do that anymore

Praying Mantis,

I haven't read the two most recent installments to this fic, but I will. Once I have, I'll post another review out of courtesy. I just want to say thanks for extending the same courtesy to me in your author's note. I do tend to come off as somewhat harsh when I write reviews, and for that, I apologize. I've been so busy with other stories (both fanfiction and other literature) that my time on the AFF boards (Resident Evil specifically) has been minimal. I saw your fic and decided to pitch my two cents. I'm relieved you weren't offended or put off, and I'm actually glad you recognized my criticism as being at least somewhat constructive. Always nice to run into readers/writers with a little patience.

Thanks again, and I hope the writing process is both fun and exciting for you.

-JM

Wow. Okay. First, it's clear that you're not too familiar with formatting. Insert line breaks in between paragraphs to reduce clutter, first of all. It makes the prose less of an eyesore.

As far as the story itself is concerned, your first chapter is entirely out of character. Luring STARS to the mansion was Wesker's plan all along. He plans for contingencies, and he doesn't show his frustration. I realize this is your first attempt at Resi fiction, but it helps to come up with a game plan. Also, writing chapters in the form of Character Logs may not be the best format to work with. Sure, it allows the perspectives to take on a more first-person feel, but it is ultimately quite clunky and unrealistic. Why in the HELL would Jill take the time to record a detailed log of herself getting violated by a zombie?

My advice is to fix your format, first and foremost. People aren't going to even want to read it if it's not inviting.

Best of luck.

-JM