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Thanks for the review of my review lol. Not many people would take the time to respond to reviews.

You say not much happened in the latest chapter, but every chapter is important, especially here where you are exploring Knil's perceptions of this foreign world.

If this fic continues the same quality this could turn into one of my favourite Zelda fics on AFF. Keep it up!

Hmm... I have to admit, I liked this chapter [a lot], and when Knil said they would get married, I about fell out of my chair from shock [and trying to suppress giggles]. I have to make a mental note to not read your stories during the evenings.
Ahh. I can see how that might be a dilemma, yes. Grammar drives me crazy, too.
Oh, oh, oh!
It was Knil!
-Laughs.-
I should be shot for that insinuation. I guess I misread that scene. Oops.
Now, in this chapter, time for some open critique...
The layout was nicely done, and you did excellent [once more] with grammar.
This chapter wasn't as long as the others, and it held more sentences than paragraphs [as compared to previous chapters; it could be my imagination, though?], but it was still a pleasant read.
I actually found the situation at the table humourous, and the fact that Knil doesn't seem to completely grasp what he's doing to her; only that she's finding excessive amounts of pleasure from it and he's enjoying that. [He's so strange, but it's so cute, ne?]
Talon and Ingo worry me. But, at the same time, I'm thankful they're stupid enough to not realize the sexual tension going on between Malon and Knil.
I wonder when Knil plans on jumping her..
-Clears her throat.-
Overall, this was a nice update [and I'm actually keeping up!]. I gave it a +++++/+++++. Great job, love! I look forward to the next chapter!

[If I left anything out, gomen ne!]

-Haru

you just get better and better by the way m story is changing over and i would love someone to review it. your chapter this time was hilarious in it's own way malon:EEEEEK! *smack* Dark link:*ow... lol keep going

ooo I really like this story! ^^ Keep it up :D
I can't wait to see what will happen in the next chapter between Knil and Malon!

Liking it so far. Well written with an interesting couple, I'll be keeping an eye on this one!

I really like this story. I'm so fucking glad I found it on here.
You did a great job making poor 'Knil' all confused and babyesque in the world he never knew. Some people have him already knowing what a lot of the things are.
You also did a nice job on portraying his hatred towards his counterpart, the one he 'shadowed'.
I truly do love this story. It's like a drug to me now...
Malon was adorable with how she reacted towards him.
The spelling and grammar is superb in this story thus far, and you're doing great with displaying their emotions and attitudes. It surprised me when she spoke in such a Southern voice in the barn, though, mind you. Can't say I'm used to that.
Anyway, cutting this long-ass review short: You're an amazing author, this was wonderfully written, and I look forward to seeing more of this story!
I gave it a 5/5 [err, a +++++... Meh.]

-Haru

yay! you updated not bad t all. my story should be updated very soon. keep on going here's an idea make some sexual tension and have Knil do something to malon at the dinner table. that will make her blush fiercely.

oooh very nice... I like. Keep up the good work ^.^

keep going, and the note a the nd by you was sweet you must have big heart

here's my advice to you, add more chapters it willl make people read more of it and like, i personally like this and think you should continue this story i really like it. this is a story that's shaping up to be something really good.