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December 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A really beautiful story, I've also read Crowded elevator.
Uh, I'm no literary expert, but your characters felt true to the original Riku/Sora Hayner/Seifer
The tenderness in this, in all the characters, is utterly touching. Maybe it's because I'm reading these late at night, tired as hell, but I got sucked into your writing and felt deeply for the characters.
Top stuff, please keep writing.
Uh, I'm no literary expert, but your characters felt true to the original Riku/Sora Hayner/Seifer
The tenderness in this, in all the characters, is utterly touching. Maybe it's because I'm reading these late at night, tired as hell, but I got sucked into your writing and felt deeply for the characters.
Top stuff, please keep writing.
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January 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The ending gave me warm fluffy feelings. And long smex scenes are always better.
Good job on this.
Good job on this.
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December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay!! I have loved the progression of this story so much as I have been reading along. I'm happy now that things have worked out for them *sap* and that was a totally hot sex scene!! *applause* Great story!! <3
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December 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The formatting woooooooooooooooooooooorked!!!
Ah, I liked this, and yes it was rushed, but it was logicaly rushed, so it doesn't feel forced. And I love Kairi's observations about the 'Gay Bois' of the island (and that you aren't bashing her, and that she's being all helpful). Kudos to your character profiling of Riku, and mini profiling of Sora and Kairi, I love it when writers get inside their heads.
Good luck with the family stuffs! & Happy Holidays!
Ah, I liked this, and yes it was rushed, but it was logicaly rushed, so it doesn't feel forced. And I love Kairi's observations about the 'Gay Bois' of the island (and that you aren't bashing her, and that she's being all helpful). Kudos to your character profiling of Riku, and mini profiling of Sora and Kairi, I love it when writers get inside their heads.
Good luck with the family stuffs! & Happy Holidays!
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December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this chapter, even if the humour was scarce compared to the others.
I just wanted to make a special note about Sora and Riku's separate mindsets on the relationship they want with each other: Riku loves Sora but he's hesitant, and doesn't understand how Sora could possibly fall in love with him after everything Riku put him through -- he doesn't think he could make Sora happy, either. Sora, on the other hand, loves Riku and is certain that even though Riku isn't in love with him (or so Sora thinks), he could make Riku happy if given half a chance.
It's just such a perfect contrast, and it suits their personalities so well: Riku, who tends to be practical to the point of cynicism; and Sora, who tends to be idealistic and optimistic, which is exactly the reason he succeeds.
I really, really love this story, and I wish like hell that AFF.net had a 'favourites' option the way FF.net does. If it does, I haven't found it.
And I'm sorry that you're feeling down. I know that it's not much help to send you internet hugs, but I am, and I hope you'll be feeling better soon. =] Try watching something mindless and fun, maybe, like a Disney movie? At least, those always cheer me up.
I just wanted to make a special note about Sora and Riku's separate mindsets on the relationship they want with each other: Riku loves Sora but he's hesitant, and doesn't understand how Sora could possibly fall in love with him after everything Riku put him through -- he doesn't think he could make Sora happy, either. Sora, on the other hand, loves Riku and is certain that even though Riku isn't in love with him (or so Sora thinks), he could make Riku happy if given half a chance.
It's just such a perfect contrast, and it suits their personalities so well: Riku, who tends to be practical to the point of cynicism; and Sora, who tends to be idealistic and optimistic, which is exactly the reason he succeeds.
I really, really love this story, and I wish like hell that AFF.net had a 'favourites' option the way FF.net does. If it does, I haven't found it.
And I'm sorry that you're feeling down. I know that it's not much help to send you internet hugs, but I am, and I hope you'll be feeling better soon. =] Try watching something mindless and fun, maybe, like a Disney movie? At least, those always cheer me up.
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December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, quick update. Nice.
Aw, short, bittersweet, and to the point. I like it.
Oh! You just have to use HTML codes to get the formatting like italics, bold, and underline at least are possible.
Okay, you use the “>” and it’s opposite in place of what I’m about to do:
[i]random stuff[/i], [b]could be anything[/b], [u]your text here[/u]
Hope that helps!
Aw, short, bittersweet, and to the point. I like it.
Oh! You just have to use HTML codes to get the formatting like italics, bold, and underline at least are possible.
Okay, you use the “>” and it’s opposite in place of what I’m about to do:
[i]random stuff[/i], [b]could be anything[/b], [u]your text here[/u]
Hope that helps!
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December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like your take on Sarcastic!Riku, GoodFriend!Kairi, and Semi-Ditz!Sora--oh dear god do I love Semi-Ditz!Sora. I was laughing my ass off when he was talking to Tidus, it was just priceless.
Well, this is cute so far, and I like how you’re going back and forth between the 2 of them, and how you can make them sound very different from each other. I was actually surprised that I was able to tell that it was Sora speaking within the first few words of part 2.
Anyway, I’ll have to keep up with this little thing, see where it goes.
Oh, and loved the part where Kairi mentioned her thoughts about being with both the boys at the same time. Made my day. XD (Course it helps that SoRiKai is my OT3)
Well... on to part 4!
Well, this is cute so far, and I like how you’re going back and forth between the 2 of them, and how you can make them sound very different from each other. I was actually surprised that I was able to tell that it was Sora speaking within the first few words of part 2.
Anyway, I’ll have to keep up with this little thing, see where it goes.
Oh, and loved the part where Kairi mentioned her thoughts about being with both the boys at the same time. Made my day. XD (Course it helps that SoRiKai is my OT3)
Well... on to part 4!
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December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Rawr, just read parts 4 & 5. Damn this is insanely cute! Ah, and I like how Sora is the one making all the moves, which is really refreshing with all the Seme!Riku must capture his clueless Uke!Sora. So yes, very cute, hope to see them cuddling like bunnies in a chapter/part or 3.
Good luck with this.
Good luck with this.
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I just wanted to say that this is a really, really sweet story. I love it to pieces, and I'm glad that you seem to be updating on a regular basis. I can't wait for more chapters! Sora and Riku both have very different voices, and I'm impressed that you managed to do that--a lot of people, when they write in first person, tend to make all characters sound the same.
Poor Tidus, by the way. I hope he ends up happy, too. <3
Poor Tidus, by the way. I hope he ends up happy, too. <3
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December 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
lol I LOVE THIS SO FAR!!! PLEASE CONTINUE! LOVIN' IT!!! Characterization is just ON POINT!!! Can't wait for Sora!!! Update soon!!! :D