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Poor Jak, he’s so horny. It isn’t easy to deal with teenage hormones. And I didn’t know Razor could be such a match-maker. What a drama chapter this was, I hope everything will work out eventually and I want to see human Dax! :)

Now I’m going to go and submit the second chapter to my story. AFF will get new chapters on two Jak and Daxter stories on the same day, that’s got to be a record or something. XD

I guess I can forgive the lack of outtakes *this* time ;)

Seriously, though. I'm in love with this story. Even with all the spoilers and sneak peeks you so generously send me, I never know just what might happen next. I love the tension Dax unknowingly created by inviting Tess out to see them race, thinking to distract himself but ending up distracting Jak just as much if not more! And now Razer knows what Orange Lightning is thinking, and of course has no qualms about using that to his advantage... I'm really looking forward to the next race scene, now that Jak is frustrated on a triple front. How will he manage to keep his mind focused and not get blown to bits on the track?!

And also... if I was anything of an artist, I would so draw a picture of all the girls pillow-fighting in Rayn's bed. Imagine all the cute and sexy sleepwear! (It's a secret, but I love cute underwear.) I dunno, it just seems sweet. All happy and giggle-y and fun. And most likely with a little ottsel eye to the keyhole, loving every moment X3 Dax is such a pervy little brat, but we love him all the more for it.

Thanks so much for the lovely update! Now I'll go work and uphold my end of the deal, so you can go rest. Hopefully I can follow your productive example! xoxoxox

Wow, I never pictured Jak to be so um… needy *wink, wink* Though I thought the race scene in ch.3 was fascinating, who knew that a crotch full of ottsel could improve ones driving ability ;)

Yay an update, very nice, keep it coming! :)

//Shush, you..stupid..inner voice thingy! I was only joking, yeesh.// XD I love that line... sounds like some conversations I might've had with myself at some point. Poor Dax. Just face it, little furry dude; resistence to the hotness that is teh Jakku is futile! Mhu-wa-ha-ha-ha!!

Shower scene is love. That trippin' over their own feet awkwardness is just to die for! But it is entirely understandable, especially Dax being so cutely curious about what, exaclty, Jak looks like all excited. Poor little virgins... we'll have to hurry up and do something about that ;) The last outtake is perfect, too. Hmm... what sound does an ottsel make when it is squished by a vengeful racer who's... erm... *proportions* have been insulted? XD Luv luv luv. And luv.

This was great! There are so few JakxDaxter story so I'm happy to have found this one. And to my delight it's well-written too, it's even harder to find one of those. So I hope you will continue this because I'm looking forward to reading more and I'm curious to see how Daxter will be turned back in to human. Keep up the good work!

Yes, I'm stalking you, snatching up all the first reviews ;) Let me say again how much I'm loving this so far, especially the second chapter. My favorite scene was Dax getting cuddled and then attacked with the hair dryer, but now that you've put up the unedited version... I think you know which scene just became the new favorite X3

Can't wait for the next chapter!