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So... what does Navi look like?
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Aww, that was cute! I enjoyed it, and you took what could possibly have been a long story and shortened it with excellent skill. Your words and actions flowed nicely. Happy writing!

Thanks for the review. Your opinion's definitely worth something.

On another note, are you planning on continuing this one? It's sweet. Creative without becoming totally unplausable.

I in turn encourage you to continue. If you do, I'll definitely be looking forward to it :)

This story is very good so far. Continue to update. I want to see what Link and Navi do next.

Cute story. I hope you finish it soon.

This story is very well written and easily understandable. It seems you grasped about as much of both charaters anyone could assume or gather from their interactions during OoT. I, personally, am hoping to see another well done chapter soon. Good luck!

I'm really liking this so far. Your writing style is very good, and having a sequel to the N64 Zeldas without an overblown story or a load of indiscriminate sex could turn out to be very cool. I think the story is genuinley quite sweet and tender so far, which is something you don't often see in AFFs.

A few constructive criticisms I would like to impart if I may:
a) a little bit of description about Navi's appearance would be nice, I mean, fairies are only circles of light in the N64 Zelda's. You could be leaving it up to the reader's imagination of course, which I respect if you've chosen to do that intentionally, but as I said, it would be nice to have a little idea of your vision of her (right now I'm imagining a Tinkerbell-type look).
b) Perhaps she and Link got together a bit quickly? I thought perhaps they would have the awkward massage moment then shrug it off, and then perhaps later in the dungeon when one of their lives are endangered (perhaps by the boss) that they'd decide to act on their feelings then. That's just my opinion, but I think it would come off less rushed (I mean the evolution of their relationship, not the writing) and leave the reader in suspense a bit longer.

Anyway, hope that feedback was of some use to you, I will be keeping an eye on this one!

Dude, you are awesome!!! I love it!!!! I soo can't wait for more!!!

For a first outing, this is certainly looking to be good. Like Nunatak said, it is rather direct, but in the case of a prologue chapter, it doesn't hit too hard. You've definitely piqued my interests, for what that's worth. Do continue, please!

More!!! More!!! Please I must read more!!!