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person Nirvana X
schedule October 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...Lol?
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic. I saw this story title in the list and thought "Well now, there's something that can't help but be read."

This was some fantastic writing, my friend. Curt and clever. You pulled off some real humor through the ridiculousness of the situation while still maintaining a sense of accuracy with his character.

Gah, I'm taking this review far too seriously!

Five-out-o-Five!
person Atsuko
schedule October 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
... ...Sorry, I can't stop giggling. X3 I love your writing.
schedule October 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"When night falls on the lonely port, caressed only by loving laps of an ocean that kisses everything in sight like a collegiate drunk chick, Linebeck makes his move."

This might be the greatest opening line I've ever read for any piece of literary work. Ever.

Definitely funny, but I really think you could've run with this concept for a while longer. Between the tongue-in-cheek humor and writing style (not to mention the overall goofiness of Linebeck), it could've been even funnier.

Not too shabby at all =)

-JM