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for Waltz of Pearls

by DanceofDarkness

person Jakuro
schedule November 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
DUDE.

Finish this fic.

For the love of all men blonde ;-;.... DOOO ITTTT.
schedule September 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ugh. I hate it when competant writers abandon perfectly good stories..! It's a damn waste. *sighs* Whatever. For that, you get a crit.

I like what IS here, though the punctuation is a little spotty. For how long it's been, you may have already improved. If not, look up some "how to"s on proper sentance structure. I only know enough about writing to know when something is wrong... *shrugs* Hope you continue writing stories, if nothing else.