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August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you are god
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August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hope u make another one or more chapters because this rocks!
schedule
August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Have Tear on top next! lol
Anyway this fic was awesome.
Best Luke/Tear fic on aff.net!
Anyway this fic was awesome.
Best Luke/Tear fic on aff.net!
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August 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
My only criticism: Where the rest of it? lol
I think you achieved what you wanted with the narrative in that there's a clear progression of how the expression of their feelings for each other changes in each succesive chapter. As much as I greatly enjoy your rather vivid depiction of sexual exploration and consummation of their love, you did a wonderful job with their reunion scene before the fun started.
Since Luke and Tear will be travelling, maybe you can put a companion with them for the next chapter to umm observe and possibly participate in some fashion? I think Natalia could use some company to *cough*"lift her spirits" *cough*.
I think you achieved what you wanted with the narrative in that there's a clear progression of how the expression of their feelings for each other changes in each succesive chapter. As much as I greatly enjoy your rather vivid depiction of sexual exploration and consummation of their love, you did a wonderful job with their reunion scene before the fun started.
Since Luke and Tear will be travelling, maybe you can put a companion with them for the next chapter to umm observe and possibly participate in some fashion? I think Natalia could use some company to *cough*"lift her spirits" *cough*.