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Great continuation! Lun is turning out to be just as wild as her momma. Your grammar was perfect, and I loved the pace. I sort of agree with what steve008 said, more detail would be nice. I noticed a bit more than usual in this chapter, so I've got no complaints.

We're going to see more of Jeane and Fuyo though, right?

Eh, interesting story. I wish you'd go into greater detail describing some of the sex though.

One thing I would love to see would be a situation where Fuyo was handling a bunch of the others at once. Like Jessica in your DQ8 story.

Also, maybe you could stage a scene where Rahal and Roog team up on one of the girls. Preferably Lun or Subala.

Criticism? Well, sometimes you mix up pronouns. Like, you'll say "his" when you mean "hers." Also, you called characters by the wrong name once or twice. Other than that, this story (like most of your others) is excellent.

Please, Streti! Update!

If you hope for updates, I would suggest that you review more thoroughly with notes on what was good and what you would hope more of. Criticism could also be interesting.

Let's see. Try as I might, I can't find any flaws regarding your writing style. It's right up my alley.

As far as content, I'd love to see a little DP involving Jeane, Viki, and Lorelei. Maybe either Lun or Fuyo could have a turn with both Roog and Rahal.

And for future reference, I would absolutely love to see Lyon and/or Miakis get in on the fun. If not in this story, eventually.

All in all, you're Stories are my all time favorites. And trust me, even though most of them are lazy, inconsiderate jerks who won't even bother to mention it via comment, Lots of people would definitely agree with me.

Streti, I can't wait for chapter 4! You are an incredible author!

Ah! Excellent piece so far! At first it was abit difficult to imagine Rahal and Fuyo as a loving couple but the first chapter is very convincing in that matter. Same goes for Roog and Lun. I do however have a feeling that both couples will be mixed into a three- or foursome eventually. Fuyo's apparent curiosity and excitement towards the eventual onlookers will be very interesting to follow. I wouldn't mind seeing her taking care of more than two cocks at a time in a later chapter. Also perhaps Lun could finally get both her precious dragon knights at the same time, as long as Subala will let Lun out of her grasp that is.

Jeane's through-the-robe-handjob is incredibly hot and even though she has already gotten alot of spunk from Lorelai her urge for more will probably never subside... I bet that whenever she has finished everyone off she would probably milk her own member dry. With all those hemaphrodites you can set up quite many interesting combinations.

Another idea came to my mind. What if the voices that Fuyo and Rahal are hearing actually comes from another party hiding in the bushes on the opposite side of where Lun, Roog and the others are? When reading you're expecting it to be them but it's never really mentioned or proved, right? Perhaps they could find another lovemaking couple in Marina and Belcoot. The two voluptuous women would probably make both men even hornier. Only a suggestion.
Love your stories, please continue!

Thanks for the encouraging reviews, everyone. They really do help to keep me inspired. I wouldn't mind a small footnote in the history of adult fiction...

Hehe, Ghost, am I getting that predictable? But hopefully there are still a few surprises left in the story. Marina and Belcoot won't be one of them unfortunately, the story is already pretty much set. Nice to hear detailed reviews too, in this and "Sunlite"!

Holy shit. One of my favorite fetishes, in excess.

You are my God, now and forever. You keep writing, and I'll carve your name into the history texts *myself*!