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July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's not a bad story for one involving an OC--these can be very difficult to write.
The sex scenes were pretty good. Freya did seem a little out of character at times. There ought to be some explanation as to who exactly Eri is, how he became an einherjar, etc. How is it that he can affect Freya in this way? Character development is a good thing.
Even so, I was glad to read this and hope to hear more from you. :) Valkyrie Profile is such a small fandom, and the amount of people who will write stories like this is even smaller. Looking forward to more of your stories!
The sex scenes were pretty good. Freya did seem a little out of character at times. There ought to be some explanation as to who exactly Eri is, how he became an einherjar, etc. How is it that he can affect Freya in this way? Character development is a good thing.
Even so, I was glad to read this and hope to hear more from you. :) Valkyrie Profile is such a small fandom, and the amount of people who will write stories like this is even smaller. Looking forward to more of your stories!