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June 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oooh, who's next?!
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April 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Omfg...
I read quite a lot and as such usually have some sort of critique or advice to give authors. But your masterpiece right here, is so good that I have really run out of words to describe it. I mean I REALLY want to start writing like a thousand words about how EPIC your story is but currently my brain is fried from the sexiness of your story. I PRAY, HOPE and WISH that you continue this AMAZING story and update soon please! I LOVE THIS!
I read quite a lot and as such usually have some sort of critique or advice to give authors. But your masterpiece right here, is so good that I have really run out of words to describe it. I mean I REALLY want to start writing like a thousand words about how EPIC your story is but currently my brain is fried from the sexiness of your story. I PRAY, HOPE and WISH that you continue this AMAZING story and update soon please! I LOVE THIS!
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April 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY! Your writing style is amazing, your plot is amazing and the sex is amazing so (cue desperate begging on knees) PLOX update!!!
P.S. Sorry if this seemed desperate but I really have nothing much else to say about how good your story is, especially since it ranks like at the top of my list of best smuts EVAR! Only a few typos and grammatical errors here and there but nothing much else so please forgive my seemingly retarded ranting.
P.S. Sorry if this seemed desperate but I really have nothing much else to say about how good your story is, especially since it ranks like at the top of my list of best smuts EVAR! Only a few typos and grammatical errors here and there but nothing much else so please forgive my seemingly retarded ranting.
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July 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm. This is a pretty good story and a hot read. I would very much like to see this continued soon. :)
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August 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
After strutting on the streets looking for someone to have her way with, Tina ends up on the receiving end and her mouth faces the biggest challenge has she ever sucked on.
And on Zack Island Hitomi discovers her hidden sexual powers taking on her first gangbang.
I love a good writen smut and with the DOA girls involved it cant go wrong. There's also a potential for a great story development. I know Kasumi would be your main focus from now on but i hope sexual girls like Lisa and Christie made an appearance also. And i too would like more of Tina, despite being greatly dominated and penetrated she sucks the fat guy dry and then asks for more.
And on Zack Island Hitomi discovers her hidden sexual powers taking on her first gangbang.
I love a good writen smut and with the DOA girls involved it cant go wrong. There's also a potential for a great story development. I know Kasumi would be your main focus from now on but i hope sexual girls like Lisa and Christie made an appearance also. And i too would like more of Tina, despite being greatly dominated and penetrated she sucks the fat guy dry and then asks for more.
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July 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I liked it the first time, but holy hell, this is way, WAY hotter. Keep it up!
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July 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, as for content, I'd definately like to see more of Tina's life now that the Lilium has affected her on what appears to be a permanent basis.
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July 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I must say this is one of the most hardcore sex fics I've read
First i like you start with the portrayal of the girls, what they wear and how they look
I especially liked the oral in Tina chapter, pretty fitting for a slut like Tina, i like how she puked gaging on the fat cock, that scene was both funny and arousing at the same time
I sure hope you put another scene with her on New Zack Island, wearing some of her slutty skimpy bikinis!!!
First i like you start with the portrayal of the girls, what they wear and how they look
I especially liked the oral in Tina chapter, pretty fitting for a slut like Tina, i like how she puked gaging on the fat cock, that scene was both funny and arousing at the same time
I sure hope you put another scene with her on New Zack Island, wearing some of her slutty skimpy bikinis!!!
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June 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hello everyone! Just letting you know that I haven't died or anything. I'm currently re-writing chapters 1 and 2 of this story, as well as going over a rough draft of ch.3 for Kasumi. I think from that point forward I'm going to focus the story more around her from now on, and have the rest of the girls as bonus chapters when the spotlight isn't on Kasumi.
Keep the reviews coming, so I know that people still want to read this.
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Keep the reviews coming, so I know that people still want to read this.
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December 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, well, soldier...
Now...this is interesting, to say the least.
Tina gettin' gangbanged, pretty cool, even though it ain't somethin' I haven't read before.
But Hitomi gettin' it good, too? Meh...I honestly found it kinda repetitive, even if there was 1 more guy included. And, I've ALSO read the exact same thing on other fandoms.
I'd appreciate it if there were some good ol' shoujo-ai/yuri AW3SOME!-ness in future chapters. Specially with Kasumi-chan.
So, that's all for now.
Update ASAP! That's an order!
Semper-Fi! Carry on!
Now...this is interesting, to say the least.
Tina gettin' gangbanged, pretty cool, even though it ain't somethin' I haven't read before.
But Hitomi gettin' it good, too? Meh...I honestly found it kinda repetitive, even if there was 1 more guy included. And, I've ALSO read the exact same thing on other fandoms.
I'd appreciate it if there were some good ol' shoujo-ai/yuri AW3SOME!-ness in future chapters. Specially with Kasumi-chan.
So, that's all for now.
Update ASAP! That's an order!
Semper-Fi! Carry on!