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I wanted to pop in and mention that I saw your review on another story (something about Pokegirls) and you mentioned that you were sad because to few authors that wrote in the PG universe weren't updating.
Well, I give you hope!
There is a alive and well community at www.pokegirl.org
O and yes, I am in the middle of reading this fic right now, but probably wont come back to review again as I read them on my pda offline.
Ttry that website, or look for the pokegirl yahoo group.

Thanks for reading, comments and suggestions appreciated!

Thanks Lordz, glad you enjoyed the story.

You'll notice a large writing difference between chapters 1-3 and the new 4. 1-3 Was written on a cruise in the Bahamas on a laptop, last year. I have since taken a small break writing and have to get back into the perverted groove. I might start focusing more so on Links heroic story, cause I personally feel that the game didn't do the best job.

I'm a huge story guy.

Chapter 4 was my most recent addition and as such needs to be scrapped and rewritten. When I find the time for it you'll know :p

Its too broken up, too much talking and thought in an act that consists of very little thought.

I'll try to reply to whatever reviews you guys give, should I pursue a writing career you guys will help me refine that. Might as well start at a subject you like the most right?

it was a good story i liked it a lot but there were some parts that were wrong when you went from part 3 to part 4. like at the end of part 3 link pulls his pants up and walks towards her but in part 4 his pants are down and he can't move. other then those kind of errors it was good

Very nice. Please continue.

Alright thanks a ton! That helps a lot. I just needed the basic names etc of the kingdom and such to build upon. I'll start working on chapter 4

"for chapter 4"

oh yup! ReDead do dance, and they were part of the dancers of the Ikana kingdom. But that's in Termina, not sure in Hyrule too, tho you can use it anyway, I think X3
Igus du Ikana was the king of, obviously, Ikana, enemies of the Garos (the hodded ninjas in Ikana canyon). They dressed kinda like Aztec warriors and stuffs. It seems they worshiped the sun or something like that. There are tons of sun shapped images in Ikana fortress.

hope that helps

The idea of the redead was kinda weird. But i liked the girl at the end.

Not to worry my friend. It will not contain anything too horrific. It all works out in the end. Hence not a gross ending...

Nice work, Iim going to enjoy this story I think. Although, having read 2 stories involving redead, and having been mentally scarred by both, I might skip that chapter.