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June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yes yes, well first of let me say that this is one of the most interesting SoraxRiku fanfics that I've read in a while.
Axel'll be there? heh, it's interesting yes, but I'm sure it'll be well done none-the-less. You must update. Because that was such a mean clifhanger. *nod*
I loved it, so please continue.
Axel'll be there? heh, it's interesting yes, but I'm sure it'll be well done none-the-less. You must update. Because that was such a mean clifhanger. *nod*
I loved it, so please continue.
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June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good story... except for Riku's dad. He talks like a pedophile from Japanese comics and it's scary.
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoy Betwixt on FF.net and I was just wondering when you will update it on there. I hope I don't sound like someone who nags, I'm just curious.
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
First of all, is Riku’s father based off of anyone/ any character, because I kept picturing Nathan Lane in his role for “Bird Cage”. Anyway, I loved that, it was perfectly hysterical and had be laughing in my seat.
Secondly, you’re doing wonderfully with this, and I encourage you to continue it. I know that having it be Sora who jumps into Riku’s arms at the end would be a little too easy, but I also don’t think that either Tidus or Wakka have “auburn” hair. So that only leaves one of the girls, or things being a dream.
Now I do admit that if it is a dream at the end, that’s pretty cheap. I’d also like to say you might want to reconsider the setup/transition to the island slightly, if it is a dream. I mean, I liked that you didn’t make it blazingly obvious that the chapter opened with a dream, and it did have a few hints, but they were extremely subtle, like only a hard core literature fan might catch them (like the jump into the water not killing/hurting him). That said, it did feel a little sudden when we found out that it was a dream. I’m sorry if I sound bossy, or if I’m not making much sense. ~__~;;;;;;;;
But yes, this looks like a fun read, and I will defiantly have to follow with this.
Secondly, you’re doing wonderfully with this, and I encourage you to continue it. I know that having it be Sora who jumps into Riku’s arms at the end would be a little too easy, but I also don’t think that either Tidus or Wakka have “auburn” hair. So that only leaves one of the girls, or things being a dream.
Now I do admit that if it is a dream at the end, that’s pretty cheap. I’d also like to say you might want to reconsider the setup/transition to the island slightly, if it is a dream. I mean, I liked that you didn’t make it blazingly obvious that the chapter opened with a dream, and it did have a few hints, but they were extremely subtle, like only a hard core literature fan might catch them (like the jump into the water not killing/hurting him). That said, it did feel a little sudden when we found out that it was a dream. I’m sorry if I sound bossy, or if I’m not making much sense. ~__~;;;;;;;;
But yes, this looks like a fun read, and I will defiantly have to follow with this.
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June 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
-Pops review viginity- If you don't update, I'll cry! And then harass you til you do. lol