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have to say i really love your story ^^ mostly cause theres more to it than just smut^^ (read: plot) but a nice amount of smut too ^^

hope youll continue this story soon and eagerly await what your gonna do with the rest of the original story of the game ^^

*faints*

That may be the best story I've ever read on this site. It's... it's like what they would really be like, if they hadn't kept the game to a T rating... You've done an exquisite job on the characters, especially Mission. I like them both good side and bad.... they're so different, but both so damn enjoyable... I'm going to add this story to my favourites, I think, and check back eagerly for updates. Or maybe just re-read it over and over...

Not enough lemons on the light side chapters, dark side always seems to outnumber them. Other than that though pretty good.

Best KOTOR story on this site.

I don't know how, but you're story keeps getting better and better, I fear if you keep updating I'll die from the sheer awesomeness this is becoming.

I eagerly await you next update and to see how you'll write Korriban.
(although I don't think anyone likes Mannan, if anyone can turn it into a rauchy, sex-filled-fuckfest, it's you.)

Awesome to see another story of yours posted, especially in this category.

Great Chapters, as always, I'm eagerly awaiting your newest chapter/story!

Wow, now that's a review. However, I think you have too many ideas for me to go by, I think your vision is best left in your hands. I don't think I'd be able to make a story that would completely rise to your expectations. I'll try to incorporate some of your ideas, but I think I'll leave most of it up to you. There's no rush to KOTOR stories, take as much time to do your other ones as you need to. We've grown up a lot here, there used to be just two and now we're 17 strong not counting chapters.

And don't worry. The plot is coming.

I don't know why more people don't review but I love this story, well actually I love the dark side version of the story. I just enjoy the light side version. I like Ravus' don't give a shit attitude and how he takes what he wants. I hope Ravus turns Bastila and Misson into his own personal cum slut slaves and eventualy Juhani too (It would fit perfectly for the dark side). I would like to recomend against Carth or any other male crumember fucking any of Ravus' women since I like stories where the main character gets the leading ladies. The other males can have the occasional prostitutes. I think you should also make this story a little more AU for the dark side and put a few twists in the original story line and maybe add a component where Ravus builds up his own persanl slave harem by gathering different girls from each world, they would not play a huge role in the story but mainly serve as a source of entertainment for Ravus for during the trips between worlds. You could use the trips between worlds for the occasional transitional chapter with an evergrowing orgy scene. I have a few examples for each world that I would like to give (remember that this is for the dark side only). Since you're almost done with Telos, lets start with Dantooine, remember the two waring famalies, well I think you should get the two families to eventually kill each other just like you can do in the game but have Ravus corrupt the daughter (Rahasia I think her name is) sexually, turning her into his slave, and get her to lie saying the other familu's son (I have no idea what his name is) raped her eventually causing each family to attack each other leaving none alive except for Ravus' group and his new slave Rahasia. On to Tatooine, You just got to have Ravus' fuck Bastilla's mom in front of her, I'd laugh my ass off. Anyways you could also turn the bitch in charge of Czerca corp on that planet, who gives you the hunting permit, into his own slave. By the way, if you need a reason for Ravus being able to do all this just say he uses the force to mess with their mind making them huge sluts and submissive to him. If the council can erase someone's mind, Ravus being able to mess with people's minds would not be a huge stretch. Plus Ravus is actually Revan so he should be very powerful in the ways of the force, being able to do things most jedi could even think of. On to Kakashyk (don't know if I spelled that right), I am not sure about any slaves here or sex scenes but it would be funny as hell if Ravus told the Jolee Bindo at some point to shut the fuck up or he will shove his lightsaber up the old man's ass (and I am actually talking about his actual lightsaber and not his dick) and activate it. On to Malan, When under water and you come upon the guy and girl who tell you how to get rid of that big fish, kill the guy, fuck the girl and make her another slave, and then go with the guys recomendation about poisoning the fish. On to Koriban (This is where the real fun is), Eventually kill the old sith dude in charge and side with the chick but instead of her turning on Ravus, make her his bitch and leave her in charge while he is not there. Also once Ravus takes control of the sith academy on Koriban, have him announce that all the female sith are now his slaves to do with as he wants (he still leaves them there once he leaves though). Also have him issue a new form of dress for female sith that is a little more slutty looking. That is all I have to say about the worlds but I do have a few more miscelanious ideas. When he runs across those groups of dark jedi from time to time, have him kill the males and sexually dominate any females making more slaves, then when he gets to Koriban drop them off there along with any other slaves he picked up along the way besides the normal crew. Bastila would be his alpha slave in charge of the other slaves and Mission and Juhani could be his Betas who only answer to Bastilla and Ravus. When Bastilla is captured my Malik have her already be on the dark side but just have her bide her time until she catches up with Ravus on that little moon near the star forge. On that moon have him, his slaves (Bastilla, Juhani, and Mission), the droids, and Candorous kill off Carth, Zalbar, and Jolee. At this point they will all be so far down the dark side and loyal to Ravus that they would do anything to please him. On the star forge just kill Malak saying something about Malak beeing a fool thinking he could kill Darth Revan. Oh ya, I almost forgot, Bastila's new battle meditation stance could be her having Ravus' dick up her pussy as she sits in meditation, this could up the power of her meditation by drawing power from her lustful dark emotions. Thoughout the story you could gradually make Ravus' main slaves (Bastila, Juhani, Mission) bigger sluts and fall even more to the dark side making them more suceptable to Ravus' commands. By the time they get to the moon, Mission would even be willing to kill Zalbar if Ravus comanded. In the end the sith take over the republic and upon returning to Koriban, Revan takes over as leader of all sith once more. You could end the story with one big orgy of Revan and all His slaves (I do mean all including all the female sith but since that would be hundreds of women just briefly mention the orgy hapening around him and focus on his three main slaves, Bastila and Juhani and Mission. Also I know that some of his slaves, like Mission, don't use the force but that does not mean they can't fall to the dark side. There are plenty of nonforce users that were sith in the game. I know this is long and I'm sorry for rambling but I just wanted to give you a few ideas and make up a little for other people not reviewing as much. This has potential to be a great smut fic along with having a good plot. I don't really have any thoughts on the light side and I guess you should focus on more on romantic/loving sex scenes between just Ravus, Bastila, Mission, and Juhani. Maybe eventually end it with them all Marying one another or a least all living together or something along those lines (I'm more intrested in the dark side). I hope you don't give up on this fic. This story inspired my own KOTOR story which is where I got all those examples from. I just don't have time to write it since I am already writing a Naruto fic on fanfiction and then have three Harry Potter fics lined up to write after that. I look forward to your next update should you make one.

it was interesting i like the difference in style from the grey side