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July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi there. I just read your review for Primal and noticed that you apparently had some questions. First off, I'd like to say thank you very much for your compliments and your honest review. I appreciate that you weren't sugar-coating your dislike of "twincest" though I do feel that you're very biased when it comes to reading them.
You asked why people don't review your story and I had a few very good ideas as to the subject. To begin, as with your apparent dislike of twincest and your tendency to throw fics into a stereotype because of it, people often read your summary (as I did) and find it to be VERY stereotypical of a mary-sue fic. Dante with an OC character who has super powers. Ho hum.
Now even though I'm sure it ISN'T one of those (judging by your apparent dislike of most things you deem "lesser" than yours in the fandom) that's what it strikes me as. Just like you consider my story to be cliche because it involves two men having sex (occasionally, despite the fact that there is actually more hetero involvement in it), I read your summary a while back and concluded that it wouldn't be my type of thing.
Maybe people don't want to read your story because of your incessant need to banter on and on about the things you hate regarding everyone else's fics. Yes, we get it, you don't like twincest. We see that. It was thrown into our faces by your bio. There's really no need to go and read stories about it only to criticize the author later.
I didn't write a story with twincest in it because that was what I thought people wanted to read. It was because it was what I wanted to read and to explore further through writing it. And my story isn't even ABOUT that..so considering it borderline cliche is a bit unfair simply because there are NOT many fanfics that involve both hetero and yaoi.
Either way, I will definitely read your story and review when I find the time. Now that I get the feeling that you're a very well versed person, I think I will enjoy what you've prepared here. One thing I would suggest would be changing up the summary. It doesn't really give the impression that you've spent a lot of time on the story, on making it unique from the other OC fics. Plus, I generally steer clear of any one-shots as they aren't really my thing.
But enough going on and on! I'll check back another time!
Solstice
You asked why people don't review your story and I had a few very good ideas as to the subject. To begin, as with your apparent dislike of twincest and your tendency to throw fics into a stereotype because of it, people often read your summary (as I did) and find it to be VERY stereotypical of a mary-sue fic. Dante with an OC character who has super powers. Ho hum.
Now even though I'm sure it ISN'T one of those (judging by your apparent dislike of most things you deem "lesser" than yours in the fandom) that's what it strikes me as. Just like you consider my story to be cliche because it involves two men having sex (occasionally, despite the fact that there is actually more hetero involvement in it), I read your summary a while back and concluded that it wouldn't be my type of thing.
Maybe people don't want to read your story because of your incessant need to banter on and on about the things you hate regarding everyone else's fics. Yes, we get it, you don't like twincest. We see that. It was thrown into our faces by your bio. There's really no need to go and read stories about it only to criticize the author later.
I didn't write a story with twincest in it because that was what I thought people wanted to read. It was because it was what I wanted to read and to explore further through writing it. And my story isn't even ABOUT that..so considering it borderline cliche is a bit unfair simply because there are NOT many fanfics that involve both hetero and yaoi.
Either way, I will definitely read your story and review when I find the time. Now that I get the feeling that you're a very well versed person, I think I will enjoy what you've prepared here. One thing I would suggest would be changing up the summary. It doesn't really give the impression that you've spent a lot of time on the story, on making it unique from the other OC fics. Plus, I generally steer clear of any one-shots as they aren't really my thing.
But enough going on and on! I'll check back another time!
Solstice
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July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it! A great mixture of humor, action and steamy scenes (if I had glasses they would've fogged up *grin*). Dante's such a horndog XD I like how you let the story build up in tension and the unwelcome interruptions by Enzo were hilarious :3 You've portrayed the uncertainty in them well, 'cause even when things can look clear-cut and uncomplicated, they don't have to be. Also with that comes the fact us women sometimes have the tendency to see things more complicated then they are >__>
Sorry, hope you don't mind too much, but I'm going to be a nitpicking twit on just one tiny, minor, (rather insignificant) point; you use 'bellowed' a fair bit of times and that's similar to shouting...in some cases other words would fit the situation better (maybe 'groan' or 'grunt' etc)...just a little pet peeve of mine *hides under a rock*
't was great to read Phoebs.
*from under rock* I'd love to see a pic of Roy in his human form... *_*
Greets,
Abyss
Sorry, hope you don't mind too much, but I'm going to be a nitpicking twit on just one tiny, minor, (rather insignificant) point; you use 'bellowed' a fair bit of times and that's similar to shouting...in some cases other words would fit the situation better (maybe 'groan' or 'grunt' etc)...just a little pet peeve of mine *hides under a rock*
't was great to read Phoebs.
*from under rock* I'd love to see a pic of Roy in his human form... *_*
Greets,
Abyss
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May 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've read many fanfictions, I've read many romance stories... but rarely do either of them do what Rules of Seduction does.
It keeps the tension in the right amounts, and keeps the tease without being overly bothersome. The description is well done and very powerful, particularly in the last "scene" xD
The highlight of the story has got to be it's dialogue, which is always fresh and well executed.
A great peice of erotic and romantic storytelling of some great characters. Amazing stuff
It keeps the tension in the right amounts, and keeps the tease without being overly bothersome. The description is well done and very powerful, particularly in the last "scene" xD
The highlight of the story has got to be it's dialogue, which is always fresh and well executed.
A great peice of erotic and romantic storytelling of some great characters. Amazing stuff
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Kneels in front of your greatness.*
Phoebe, you have once again struck genius. This "smut-fic" is a masterpiece of writing, romance and satisfaction-of-horny-boys. I know because I am a literature fan, a romantic and a horny boy, all wrapped up in one package. XD
I like how you kept the story to a romantic level instead of the usual sex-in-every-chapter thing one sees in most smut-fics. It gives the fic more class and presses the horny readers to read onward and experience a great tale, instead of giving them the "fapping material" they crave for from the first chapter and turning them off from reading the rest. (I speak of experience... >.> ) I also enjoyed how you explored the feelings of Dante and Tess (for each-other and their personal thoughts). Kudos for the brilliant action scene, too.
And finally, the smut of the fic was simply astounding. None have read a fanfic that excites one so much. True genius, Phoebe. True genius.
Phoebe, you have once again struck genius. This "smut-fic" is a masterpiece of writing, romance and satisfaction-of-horny-boys. I know because I am a literature fan, a romantic and a horny boy, all wrapped up in one package. XD
I like how you kept the story to a romantic level instead of the usual sex-in-every-chapter thing one sees in most smut-fics. It gives the fic more class and presses the horny readers to read onward and experience a great tale, instead of giving them the "fapping material" they crave for from the first chapter and turning them off from reading the rest. (I speak of experience... >.> ) I also enjoyed how you explored the feelings of Dante and Tess (for each-other and their personal thoughts). Kudos for the brilliant action scene, too.
And finally, the smut of the fic was simply astounding. None have read a fanfic that excites one so much. True genius, Phoebe. True genius.
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May 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ive only read bout 1/3 so far but i give it 8/10 ^^ ill finish it when im not preocupied and can sit to enjoy reading it =3
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May 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hello midear!
Yes indeed I have read this; many times in fact. You know I love it, I love all of your work, you multi-talented little... piece of hotness you! Haha, okay, so I suppose you want to know what I like about it? Alrighty, well, first off, it gives the reader some background information on Tess and her relationship with Dante, and secondly, well it's just hot. It's really well written and everything, so you should be proud!
Yes indeed I have read this; many times in fact. You know I love it, I love all of your work, you multi-talented little... piece of hotness you! Haha, okay, so I suppose you want to know what I like about it? Alrighty, well, first off, it gives the reader some background information on Tess and her relationship with Dante, and secondly, well it's just hot. It's really well written and everything, so you should be proud!
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May 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story! Love Tess' embarassment, as well as the multiple appearances of Enzo - Moment Killer. Dante's referring to Tess as "his Tess" is awesome and perfectly in-character, in my opinion.
His advice to the caller to "go find a hole and hide in it" was hilarious, as is Dante's asking Tess if she wants morning coffee.
I also love the reply Dante gives when Tess asks him who he is and what he's done with Dante.
The "date" was great. Dante REALLY can't get a break, can he?
As another reviewer said, you manage to create a good love scene and don't swear. That's good.
Finally, Roy's exclamation of "Definately was a bad idea to leave them alone" made me burst out laughing.
His advice to the caller to "go find a hole and hide in it" was hilarious, as is Dante's asking Tess if she wants morning coffee.
I also love the reply Dante gives when Tess asks him who he is and what he's done with Dante.
The "date" was great. Dante REALLY can't get a break, can he?
As another reviewer said, you manage to create a good love scene and don't swear. That's good.
Finally, Roy's exclamation of "Definately was a bad idea to leave them alone" made me burst out laughing.
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May 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Voila!! This is so far the best DanteXOC story I've ever read. Your OC is charming and much different from the regular sluts poor Dante gets paired with,poor lil' him XD
I love Dante's character in your story... pushy,obnoxious,and still so sweet ^_^ And the sex scene was damn good,you give a lot of details without using profane language,fantastic! *hugs*
I love Dante's character in your story... pushy,obnoxious,and still so sweet ^_^ And the sex scene was damn good,you give a lot of details without using profane language,fantastic! *hugs*