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perhaps the best realized sstory In this vein that I have ever read! Even though I have only read the first chapters as of now, I know that this is one of those rare gems, a story that provides first class erotic writing as well as true and realistic (maybe) insight into the game.

Excellent work, sir. I'm at a disadvantage, though, since I've never actually played any Legend of Zelda games. Madness, I know. Luckily for me, your story stands on its own quite well, but I imagine that fans of the game are getting an even more satisfying experience. Link seems like a quite amiable and sympathetic character in Heated Twilight, and the female characters have an enjoyably strong presence to them. Your effort and talent is evident, and I look forward to seeing more. Now I just have to go buy a Wii and play this game... If I could find a Wii to begin with. Acursed shortages!

I'm afraid your email appeared "hidden" in your profile, so if you could share that, it would be appreciated.

Cheers!

Wow! This is one of the more detailed and well-written Zelda-lemon series out there!! All the revisions made have all made sense and the characterizations are down to a T of their original core with any add-ons perfectly in harmony with said character cores.

The engagement between Link and Illa was perfectly done, both romantic and passionate without degrading into pure smut-drivel.

Uli and Link's "mentor/student" encounter was well handled, a very tastefully handled situation without compromising their character traits.

I look forward to more of this series! As for the age manipulation of the younger generation for use in future "sessions" I say let it be so!

This is excellent. Please continue.

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i love your story. please tell me there will be a link/agatha chapter and a link/midna chapter??

haha.
im into lolis. ;D

Thought of a few scenarios to those suggestions. For Ashei, maybe she and Link could get caught in a pocket of snow or a small cavern in Snowpeak with no immediate escape, and she pragmatically suggests sex to keep warm and pass the time. Or, if you wanted to include all the resistance members with her, including Telma, she could have Link participate in their secretive group sex sessions for Link to be accepted by the group.

As for Beth, maybe the age question could spur her to want to prove to Link that she is not a little girl anymore. She seems to hang around Link's hut together with the other kids, but what if she gathered the necessary courage to climb up and surprise Link while he's still sleeping and the other kids aren't up? Link, after waking up, might not accept her right away, but after talking with her, would relate to her similarly as Uli did to him during their early times, except that she wants the crash course straight away, including intercourse. This could be explored in a number of different ways, locations and time perspectives as well, of course. Just throwing a few simple ideas around...

It was decent, and you have good ideas, but... I really think you need a beta reader. There were several spelling and syntax errors, mostly typos. Also, this is written almost entirely in the passive. Passive writing is something you absolutely want to avoid, it makes readers tune out and skip ahead.

Other than that, pretty good. Keep at it!

Heh, I didn't come think that the review system would also catch my < i > tags. Good thing you noticed it anyway.

Well, it's also time for a fuller review since I had the time to read the existing chapters thoroughly. Some of the changes, like the mysterious woman and Uli's lack of pregnancy, might come as a little surprise to those expecting a completely faithful story to the game, but the author's notes at the end do explain these changes very well. The relationship between Link and Ilia was very well set up, keeping their friendship open while also giving them their sexual relationship. The spring was a great scene for them indeed, apt and sexy.

The decision about Uli and Link's relationship was well argued for, as well. I don't think she would be considered a predator, especially in relation to other stories, where Link and she have fallen helplessly to their lust in a potentially damaging way. So, a great scene for her as well. Her facial could have been still showier, though. It's a rare occurrance. ;)

About the word innocence: when in doubt, use two c's.

Regarding future chapters, I would like to see Beth with Link. In the game, she is distractingly aggravating for her supposed age. I do agree with your notion to raise the kids' ages as well, seems that they have been made too young in the game. Great characters all around, Telma, Hena and Ashei being my favorites of the ones not mentioned here yet. Ashei seems to be a little disdainful of Link, but maybe she wants to prove herself wrong and see that Link is a man and not just a boy by taking him into bed. (There weren't any in Telma's tavern in the game, but that could surely be fixed.) Telma also specifically asked linked to return to the tavern for his reward, and I don't think she meant meeting the resistance members... while Hena might be getting a little bored in that fishing hole. Nude swimming, some teasing in her cabin..? And if you are partial to the idea of the raunchy Wolf Link that I presented in "Desires of Dark", there's that time when spirit Iza is hoping for something to warm her, just when Wolf Link with his fur happens to be standing close by.

So, alltogether a very promising start for the story, with a nice mix of plot, character relations and the well-written sex scenes, including a Link that is an actual persona. Cheers for the existing chapters, and I will be looking forward to seeing more!

More Twilight Princess stories, lovely. The game must be giving some pretty strong hints about these pairings... Anyways, I couldn't really read the Uli chapter because you had missed one tag in there, just after the first . Please edit it in soon.