rate_review Reviews

I must say, I am contstantly impressed by your writing style. The personalities in your story are three dimensional and the reader is shown just a little more of your Link's mindset. Beth's motivations were believeable, although you could have spent just a little more time explaining Beth's state of mind.

It does have a slight, sorry to put it bluntly, egotistical edge to it, but unlike most I find who manage to convey that in their works, you rightly deserve it.

For mistakes, I could only find one (though I am by no means an English Teacher or Literary Critc), and that is so minor I woulnd't even consider it a proper mistake: Villager, not village. Likely a minor typo that spell check corrected...incorrectly.

Just wanted to say best erotic zelda story I've ever read. Heck, this is better than mpst erotic fiction I've read, and that's saying something. You have some real talent in writing, and not just the sex parts.

May I make a suggestion? There is a scene just after Link (in wolf form) meets Zelda for the first time, that Minda transforms in Ilia in order to mock him/remind him about his reasons for fighting. I think theirs potential for an interesting scene based off that. Like when Link is in human form again Minda takes that form and "has her fun" with him, which is both pleasurable and cruel to Link and fits Minda's personality. Personally I can't get behind Link/Midna when Midna is in imp form.

How long until mocre of this is out? Any idea?

God, I'm loving this story so far. The first four chapters were great, so I look forward to some more stuff really soon. I always did think Link could make a huge score off grateful women in TP. There are so many... I don't suppose there's a Midna tale coming up, is there? What with the twilight about to coat the land and all...

Also, I wanna see (way later on) Link's boat ride, where he destroys rocks with bomb arrows, and then upends the boat as it goes over the waterfall. Zora boat girl rescues him from drowning and HOORAY! Stuff happens.

And Telma, just for laughs, cause her breasts are as big as Link's head.

This would be I think one of the only high quality Twilight Princess lemons series of all, you blend both the baser tendencies of the mind in sex while at the same time taking the approach of it as two people in full awareness of the act itself. Bravo.

However, I was wondering if people have given you requests for Link and Beth, I ask have any given you for Midna, both adult and child, I think it would be a shame to not include her in the fun especially considering she's there throughout the entire game both as an adviser and companion with back story, much more so than Navi ever had.

Take care,

Konous

Your text is very good, speaking as a fellow writer. You do seem to avoid personal names like the plague during sex scenes, leaving the reader with a plethora of "The apparent savior", "The young rancher", "The mayor’s daughter", and "The saucy housewife". While these are fine in small doses, I found it to be rather excessive.

Other than that, I do like where you're going with it, and I hope to see you continue to update soon.

Take care, best of luck!

~Charles

Amazing. By far the best Zelda fanfic on the sight.

Hey again. Just thought you might find this interesting. In Twilight Princess, just after you meet Zelda te first time, Midna takes the form of Ilia for a moment. Thought that might help you out with ideas. Rreally looking forward to future updates.

Whew! That was a very hot chapter, so much so that it makes me wonder how incredible the next one will be.

More! I can't wait!

Are you still updating this story? You really should, as it's brilliantly written. +++++