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this is cool i cant wait for agitha i hope she gets lots of chapters

Poor Link, not getting to climax. And poor Beth, having such a complete first sexual encounter and yet missing a chance to experience a boy's ejaculation. There is really no reason for Link to have restrained and restricted himself so. Not inside her, that is perfectly understandable, but not at all, and especially after such a strain. It was rather anticlimactic, excuse the double meaning. But aside from that, the rest of the encounter was well written, detailed and involved. The updated chapter also seems to bring down the overly adult tone of Beth, perhaps partly because of the extended, and maturing, encounter. It succeeds in giving a clearer impression of the permissive atmosphere even before the intent it spelled out in the end. Overall, it was indeed good before, and this is an improvement, but with that one puzzling omission, or lack thereof (ahem).

Still one of the best things I've read.

First off, love the story. Sex is great, and you make time to develop the character's and situations, integral for the level of quality you're going for.

As for suggestions regarding the fishing girl, she doesn't strike me as the type to sleep with a guy after their first meeting. It would prehaps have to take plave after Link has visited and the two have gotten to know each other better.

Prehaps, and this is just a suggestion, Link could make the first move in this case? Perhaps the lonlyness and despair of being separated from his home and friends getting to him? A moment of weakness for the hero that shows he is not invincible. I like the idea myself, with tweaking it could work.

I seem to have mentally skipped a number there. It should be sixth and then 7, and even those are referring to the AFF numbering instead of the in-story numbering, so perhaps I should have subtracted one (fifth and 6) instead of adding one. Thus, the confusion.

Ah, I must be checking AFF too seldom these days, to have missed these updates. Yet great to see you have returned. The scene with Uli and Ilia was lovely, though it remains unclear whether he climaxed in their handling, despite the word expressly mentioned.

The scene with Rusl and Ilia was great too and I would have liked to see it detailed further. I was interested in the scene between Rusl and Ilia as well, but the explnation of physical/mental for it was fitting. Also, I should think that you need not consider political correctness on a site such as this, to not limit scenes in that regard.

Now, the scene with Beth, you might think me one to be disappointed in it, but I'm quite pleased with it. Sexless it certainly isn't, as there is a very sexual encounter despite its relative innocence. You've handled it tastefully and I think it's a great scene for Link and Beth. I do wish that it will be developed later, such as in Kakariko, though. There is one thing though, her dialogue sounds much too adult. A line like “My own damned foolishness.” is just one of them, the sentence structure and lexicon would sit ill with any of the older characters, and much less Beth.

The seventh chapter was perhaps following the game too closely to prove especially riveting, but the writing and description continue to be solid. I'm not entirely sure from the notes whether ch. 8 will have a sexual encounter, but looking forward to it nevertheless.

Hena seems to be pretty obsessed with good fishermen. Maybe Link could spend some time there with her and talk or something, catch a monster fish, earn her respect, and go from there.

I don't know, I'm not much of an ideas person, just a thought.

This story is very very good. I have absolutly no criticisms or complaints.

Wow... just wow! I'm very impressed with your use of allusions and foreshadowing, as well as your writing style as a whole. It's people like you and stories like this that bring me to AFF. I, for one, will most definitely continue to check for new chapters.

I absolutely love this story. While the sex scenes are well written and very enjoyable to read, I find myself more interested in how the story is unfolding. Great work, I look forward to reading more.