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ok i would just like to point out that Marluxia is not number 12 but 11. Larxene is 12 xD
aside from that, i think u have a very smooth story going on here. it's very sweet and fun to read.
and u know what? ur OC if fine, personally i dont like OCs but the way u introduced her and stuff makes her carry no threat (of overpowering the story) as long as she remains a minor character. i mean honestly, Demyx straight? u've gotta be kidding me. that guy screamed gay when he first appeared with his 'dance water dance'. so everyone should just chill and let u write ur story. they dont like it? move on then, everyone here obviously came to read about roxas and axel, so there's no need to get wrapped up in the minor characters affairs. there's a reason why the summary had axel and roxas in it and not the OC.
that all aside, thanks for the update! i'll be looking forward to many many more!

Is it bad to think that the game would have been more interesting if it had played out like this instead? Not saying the game was boring, but it definitely didn't have enough Roxas in it... :D

So far, I think it's very nice work. You write well, and it's always refreshing to see a story that is free from grammatical / spelling errors. Really want to read more now, if there was more :)

Oooh, I like this story! It's interesting to think about what happened if Roxas rejoined Org.XIII. I like the style in which this was written, and I also like the storyline. Roxas and Axel are so cute together! I'm very curious about Xarnia and the other person (Xev?) too. I can't wait to read more of this! :D

Final Mix+ isn't coming over? Your sure? Like there's no way? They finally said it officialy?
(ignore spelling errors as it is 4am...)

About what "TheVastOrganizationMemberXenjn" said, if you wanted to take out the OCs you could always replace them with the existing ORGy members, base your story more on Final Mix+. I mean the Nobodies have those portal things now, so you can fight them, you could always say their alive that way. (if you need any info about the portals that you can't find you can ask me)

And they do have a point... I almost stoped reading cause of the OCs, I normally never read fanfic's with them in it. It really is a great story, I just really don't like Original characters that much...

Whoa, adding the mystery characters? Interesting... I'm glad this is going to be longer than 5 chapters; it certainly has the potential to go to at least ten. -waits for next update-

OMG I WANNA READ MORE!!!!! *spazzes out* I love this fic. you really capture their personalities well! *cheers for AxelxRoxas* =3 PLZ update!! [[waiting patiently]] ^_^

Yay you updated.

(This may sound a little weird, but I was playing KH2+ today and I thought of this fic, it was odd, right in the middle of the Roxas/Axel fight I couldn't help but think about how differnt the game would be if Roxas had gone with him, then I thought of this story. I guess it's a sign that an author has the reader really hooked when they just suddenly think of a story.)

Aww!!!!!
I love this story, and I really hope you continue it.
And I love the image I get of Axel in flame-accented pj pants, too :)

::Chants 'Update, update, update.' in the background.::

~__~;;;; Why'd ya stop there?!?!?

So, can we have more of this uber-cute!fic?