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WOW Very nice! How about a third chap with more smut and a very pegnant Joanna?? :)

Weldone hope there's more to come...

Ohho, a sexy PDZ story. The lesbian part was nice, although I likely wouldn't have been reading the story without the futa. Too bad there were no outside cumshots or more revelling about Chandra's orgasms. That position is a very hard one to swallow in, did not any spill out of Jo's mouth? Is Chandra's semen potent, could Jo be impregnated? Also, in the second chapter, it seemed there was little attention paid to their breasts, even with two pairs of sweaty, full tits jiggling with their exertions. The writing overall was good however, including the lead-in in the first chapter, although the confession of love... well, heat of the moment perhaps? In the first chapter, you don't disregard clothes, you discard them, but other than that, I saw no low-level errors. All in all, enjoyable!

Sorry it wasn't quite what you expected. I seems to be the only Perfect Dark writer on here any more I'm afraid. Maybe one day I'll come back to it but I'm pretty much done with those characters for now. Maybe you could try another website :)

I'd hate to seem like an asshole, but this really wasn't what I wanted. The fic was going very good until you got to the part where Chandra had a penis. Nah, that didn't really do it for me. Although I decided to keep reading, and I'll tell you it's done really well. Just not the "really well" I was looking for.

Good job though

oh man, I'm sorry. I just realized that I said "you can do it however you want as long as it's f/f sex between Joanna and Chandra"

Sorry man, next time I'll learn to be more specific