rate_review Reviews

Well, good to see you back from the allure of decadence. Hope to see more.
SailorNemesis

Ok, just a few points. In general, I disagree with authors who ask their readers for guidance evey step of the way. It's nice to try and please the folks but, write your OWN story. We are here because we approve of what you write on your own. Second, for someone with disinfectant, good physical coordination and a high pain tolerance there is no problem with self piercing (especially the nipples and vaginal lips which have no large arteries). Lara qualifies in all these areas. Don't obsess over hyper-realism. You have missed that mark many times in sex scenes but it's ok because it's fun. As long as you don't become preposterous, you can get a little unrealistic and it works. One last point. I read these stories to see some non-fatal/disfiguring abuse of imaginary girls. I don't need or want them to escape in the end (at least on camera)and I certainly don't want a flash-forward assuring me that they do. I just want to read about sex and dominance. If you need to have Lara walk away in the last chapter, fine. But until then just concentrate on piercing and animals.
Hope this helped.

SailorNemesis (please refer to me by this handle)

I heard a real horror story about someone in who lived nearby who tried to pierce himself, but after reading SailorNemesis's post it occurred to me that I never even heard if he used disinfectant, so yeah, scratch that part of my last review. :)

Nice work on the new chapter. I'm leaning toward McGee being killed, Gordo has so many depraved things worked out for Lara and it would be a shame if she didn't get to do some of them. Speaking of which, how would she get the piercing done without someone else finding out about it? If she does them herself she risks severe injury or death, Gordo should have thought about that.

This is one of the best Tomb Raider stories I've read. Your vocabulary/style of writing is very well developed, and the subject matter of your story is, in my opinion, genuinely disturbing. Good job fleshing out Lara's character too, not to mention your solid characterisation of original characters. The only thing I'm not too keen on is the bestiality, but you seem to be moving away from that. I'm rating this five/five.

Hi,
Good to see you back from your long vacation. Kill McGee. Hoping for more Gordo antics. Make Lara pierce herself. Hope the animal Lara ends up with is a lion. Keep writing.
SailorNemesis

Cooool, man.

Hmm....I'm feeling sorry for Lara at this point, whichever person she has to kill to extricate herself faster is my choice.

dude how about getting off your ass and stop procrastinating and actually try and finish what you start? This is really getting annoying as you keep saying you'll update but never do.

Excellent!

Please continue!

This is an excellent chapter and a really interesting story so far.

Also stick with DD breasts from Legend...