rate_review Reviews

This story is suffering from a lack of discernable focus. I read your discussion thread in hopes of finding one, only to come away with the revelation you may be at an even greater lack of focus than the work.
You say the stone grows moe powerful the more pieces it brings together into it's whole. Explain - given the glaring loss of control of Lara; something unlikely given it's increased mass from the time it prevented her movements inspite of her "best efforts" the previous day - how chapter 38 works? I would guess you just found inspiration.
I would suggest this: she blacks out as her body surrenders to this will, and all but kills Hanson gathering his lust. Leave the hardcore shit for when this thing isn't gathering slivers, and just wants fun.

But all that said, chapter 38 is disgusting. I hate you for writting it.

I'm... gehhh. No thanks for any further updates. I can't read past that last one, and never will.

Very nice idea about how to open the gate. Hope to see FMC continued for another 30 chapters hehe...

Slapping is the key? To bad no one told Everest, Gordo, all the trouble with blackmail. Do you even know what you're writting anymore?

... the more of stone is united, the MORE powerful it becomes. Guess you forgot.

Tomb Raider:Spineless Dish-rag Chronicles.
I'm done with this pos

Fapulicious. Let the man tell his amazing, hot, erotic, story. Chill with the hysterics kiddies - it's a fucking, bdsm, rape story. But it has a good story arch, and ending planned. Sorry but I like this character, and want her free of this shit that I am loving reading her go through. I think it could be toned down a bit, but I'm not the author, and I kind of trust that she needed to be slapped 50,000,000 times... or maybe not. But like I said - not my call. Great job.

What did I say. Same old tired shit. Hanson=Godo. Lame ass, unoriginal shit.

Nice! Lara got tamed big time.