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for Not really a RomaningSaga

by Slayzer

person Josie
schedule May 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Aside from a few spelling errors its not a bad start. I suggest one with Aisha and Niedhart, because you know he wanted to keep her at the castle as more than a student. They are supposedly unfullfilled reincarnations of former rulers or at least it looks like it, but can you trust Niedhart's father? You could tie them into the first piece, if there's a semi awkward transition/scene showing Albert "introducing" Aisha to the Prince as one of his party members he's acquired with Sif.